Mairi Posted March 29, 2005 Report Posted March 29, 2005 Sincerity I look around and stand on my own feeble feet Glancing at the nobodies who surround me I raise my glass and with one loud proclamation; ?Here?s to a lifetime of lies and deception? Applause and we all swirl the envy-green liquid into our mouths The taste of impurities fresh on our tongues We talk of bitterness and the less fortunate We laugh but only at the expense of others We speak but it?s only to degrade each other We think but it?s only intense jealous thoughts I suppose sincerity is too hard to grasp nowadays Please comment.
Mairi Posted March 30, 2005 Author Report Posted March 30, 2005 Thanks, would you mind commenting on it properly then?
marko90 Posted March 30, 2005 Report Posted March 30, 2005 That was very good...not too long, where it doesn't flow well anymore...and not to short where it doesn't flow at all...in all...I enjoyed it...
Foxy Posted March 31, 2005 Report Posted March 31, 2005 Mairi, thats so cool... I love the bit about envy green liquid, your subject matter is always very thought provoking...rock on girl
OLD 55 Posted April 3, 2005 Report Posted April 3, 2005 I think it's a very well structured poem - and it IS a poem, doesn't have to rhyme - but very cynical for one so young. There's a lot of GOOD, sincere people in the world too. Sometimes you just have to look a little deeper.
pete38890 Posted April 3, 2005 Report Posted April 3, 2005 I applaud the talent and the cynicism. And there's this seed: it made me look at myself and want to change. The feeling will pass, but in the brief moments that I consider your song I hate what I am.
pete38890 Posted April 3, 2005 Report Posted April 3, 2005 Thanks, dude. You know where it's from, of course, but have you sung it in unison 283 times, in venues from San Diego to Bath and all points in between?
pete38890 Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 That is to say (by Tim Curry's interpretation) My my my mama my my my mama my my my mama my my (I'm a wild and an untamed thing...)
pete38890 Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 But Mairi, I am sorry that we've digressed from your original. It deserves more respect.
Aunt_Acid Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 I was only away for a second- Doing what?! Master. Bating!
Aunt_Acid Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 A RHPS geek back in the seventies I presume.
pete38890 Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 That is to say that you don't know but you want to appear clever? And what makes you think you're invited to this conversation?
Aunt_Acid Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 No, it's saying I don't know but I have an idea. And I started this conversation. If you want to be a little b*tch, go start another RH conversation. Don't make me hack you up with an ice pick.
pete38890 Posted April 4, 2005 Report Posted April 4, 2005 I like you. I really like you. You have the kind of attitude that will serve you well in later years. Here's hoping you live the insular kind of life that will insure longevity.
pete38890 Posted April 5, 2005 Report Posted April 5, 2005 Would it be untoward of me to say that you and I should do a little elbow thing someday?
Aunt_Acid Posted April 5, 2005 Report Posted April 5, 2005 I like you. I really like you. You have the kind of attitude that will serve you well in later years. Here's hoping you live the insular kind of life that will insure longevity. Leave me alone.
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