BandPatrol Posted February 19, 2005 Report Share Posted February 19, 2005 Hi there, not sure if this is ok for this forum but I'd like to ask you nice people what you think of a song of mine called 'When the World Fell Down'. Just click on the link below to hear it: http://www.sims-solos.pwp.blueyonder.co.uk/Chester/wtwfd.wma hope you like it. Here are the lyrics: It scares me here, Don?t scare me here Don?t leave me here, to die Underneath the sun, it had all begun in reason Now the time has come for us all to stand aside Chorus When the world fell down, I couldn?t hear you scream out When the world fell down, I didn?t think to listen The voices all turned into to one, the sounds they merged together When the World fell down On me Verse I don?t want to see, what you?d have me believe That beautiful things never last When it all began we would understand the reasons Why we should look to the future not the past Chorus Bridge So catch your breath and look inside if you don?t know what to do Use the powers that you still hide They lie somewhere in you (Somewhere in you) Chorus We're a band called chester and more music can be found on our website at www.chester-online.net It'd be cool to get the opinions of people who have no prior experience of us. Thanks guys, Alex Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Addictedtoclassic Posted February 19, 2005 Report Share Posted February 19, 2005 It's a good song, although I didn't listen to it, just read the lyrics. I'm not quite sure about this part in the chorus though The voices all turned into to one, the sounds they merged together Other than the extra "to" in there, it just doesn't sound right. The first line is all right, but the second line just doesn't seem to fit. Not sure why though, but when I read it, that line stands out. Otherwise it's a pretty good piece. I'm a little perplexed on the meaning as the first verse leans one way while the bridge seems to lean another. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BandPatrol Posted February 19, 2005 Author Report Share Posted February 19, 2005 Thanks for having a look. Yeah that 'into to one' is a misprint. Do you think the sounds merging together doesn't fit because of meaning or simply because the words don't seem poetic? Have a listen to the song see if it makes any sense in there. It's basically about digging deep when the world seems to be (or is literally) collapsing around you, you may seem scared at first but heros are so called not because they don't get scared but because they take action regardless of how scared they are. Thanks again, Al Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Addictedtoclassic Posted February 20, 2005 Report Share Posted February 20, 2005 It's definitely that the words don't sound as poetic. Especially the word "merged". Sounds to scientific then poetic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danielj Posted February 20, 2005 Report Share Posted February 20, 2005 It makes more sense when you listen to the song. It's really good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BandPatrol Posted February 20, 2005 Author Report Share Posted February 20, 2005 Thanks for listening Danielj. I can see where ATC is coming from but yeah listen to the song see if it makes more sense like that. I used to use big words a lot in my songs, not scientific especially but things like incosequential, but it didn't really go with the kind of music we make. Best suited to agsty females such as Alanis Morrissette Thanks for listening anyway. Al Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aunt_Acid Posted April 28, 2005 Report Share Posted April 28, 2005 I really like this, it's great. What instruments did you use in it? I hear a mellotron or a cello or something in there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aisha Posted April 28, 2005 Report Share Posted April 28, 2005 I really liked your song. It is right down my alley. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Earth-Angel Posted April 29, 2005 Report Share Posted April 29, 2005 I liked your voice and the song, Alex, but somehow the chorus isn't really distinguished from the rest of the verses. Like it merges too much from the bridge into the chorus. Maybe a little variation in the tone of your voice might help this. Otherwise, it sounds pretty good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uncle Joe Posted April 30, 2005 Report Share Posted April 30, 2005 Great song Alex...and a great sound. I do agree with Earth Angel as to the chorus/verse. Perhaps a modulation is needed? Something slightly more dramatic than what you are doing. Otherwise, excellent. Thank you for sharing it with us and good luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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