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Mairi

The Mirror

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Hey, im back writing again, let me know what you think please!

The Mirror

My whole self filled with all-consuming loathe

i hate 'it'

'it'

Not even good enough for a name

I scream

I shriek

"What the hell is wrong with you?"

'it' whimpers

"Why can't you be normal?"

"No wonder no one likes you"

no one likes you

no one likes you

the thought echoes in 'it's' mind

"You're pathetic, a little thorn in my side

i could easily pull you out

and you would be forgotten"

I hiss insults, the tone of my voice resembling

the bitterness of a lemon

i hate 'it'

I HATE 'IT'!

"If you died, no one would care"

The insults come quicker

more vivid

more, dare i say, evil

vicous

spiteful

shrieking like a banshee

louder and louder

vicious vicious vicious

"You don't deserve to live!"

"Die, b*tch, die"

One final, large, uncontrollable yell

"I HATE YOU!"

Calmer now, much calmer

not rational, but calmer

"Who are you?"

"what are you trying to be?"

My reflection whispers

"Only me".

Thoughts much appriciated.

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Well Mairz, I've seen your photos so I know this cannot be autobiographical. The mirror loves you. You're gorgeous.

And, everyone here loves you, too.

Hateful? That's not you.

It bothers me to think that you may be feeling that way about yourself.

As for the writing, very good. I like how you get so much meaning into so few words.

They say that Voltaire once apologized to a correspondent for having written such a long letter. He said he just didn't have the time to write a short one.

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Mairi, my first reaction to this was sadness that you would feel this way. And then I remembered my teenage years and was relieved that you have the talent to deal with these normal emotions through your writing.

"Who are you?"

"what are you trying to be?"

My reflection whispers

"Only me".

Kick ass, my sweet Mairz. :bow:

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I agree Mairi you have an excellent talent there, it is something you have or its something you dont, you cannot learn to be creative... You my freind are VERY creative and have the talent to express it to others...kudos!! :rockon:

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