Mairi Posted December 29, 2004 Report Posted December 29, 2004 Hey, im back writing again, let me know what you think please! The Mirror My whole self filled with all-consuming loathe i hate 'it' 'it' Not even good enough for a name I scream I shriek "What the hell is wrong with you?" 'it' whimpers "Why can't you be normal?" "No wonder no one likes you" no one likes you no one likes you the thought echoes in 'it's' mind "You're pathetic, a little thorn in my side i could easily pull you out and you would be forgotten" I hiss insults, the tone of my voice resembling the bitterness of a lemon i hate 'it' I HATE 'IT'! "If you died, no one would care" The insults come quicker more vivid more, dare i say, evil vicous spiteful shrieking like a banshee louder and louder vicious vicious vicious "You don't deserve to live!" "Die, b*tch, die" One final, large, uncontrollable yell "I HATE YOU!" Calmer now, much calmer not rational, but calmer "Who are you?" "what are you trying to be?" My reflection whispers "Only me". Thoughts much appriciated.
Uncle Joe Posted December 29, 2004 Report Posted December 29, 2004 Well Mairz, I've seen your photos so I know this cannot be autobiographical. The mirror loves you. You're gorgeous. And, everyone here loves you, too. Hateful? That's not you. It bothers me to think that you may be feeling that way about yourself. As for the writing, very good. I like how you get so much meaning into so few words. They say that Voltaire once apologized to a correspondent for having written such a long letter. He said he just didn't have the time to write a short one.
Tenacious_Peaches Posted December 29, 2004 Report Posted December 29, 2004 Mairi, my first reaction to this was sadness that you would feel this way. And then I remembered my teenage years and was relieved that you have the talent to deal with these normal emotions through your writing. "Who are you?" "what are you trying to be?" My reflection whispers "Only me". Kick ass, my sweet Mairz.
Scott-Free Posted December 29, 2004 Report Posted December 29, 2004 Mairi, I too didn't know you wrote poetry. This is a great poem. I felt every word and expression. Can't wait to read more of your work! Scott-Free
Earth-Angel Posted December 29, 2004 Report Posted December 29, 2004 I know just how she feels. Some of us never grow out of it though. Let's hope and make sure she does! As always, Marz, excellent, truthful and touching. This girl has talent!
marko90 Posted December 29, 2004 Report Posted December 29, 2004 I agree Mairi you have an excellent talent there, it is something you have or its something you dont, you cannot learn to be creative... You my freind are VERY creative and have the talent to express it to others...kudos!!
Addictedtoclassic Posted December 30, 2004 Report Posted December 30, 2004 Mairi, it's been so long since you've written anything. And then you come back with this, says quite a bit. Although it seems so upsetting. I only hope you don't feel this way too often. But the words sound so beautiful in a sad sort of way.
Zaeem Posted December 30, 2004 Report Posted December 30, 2004 Very Very good.I liked it, wish best of luck in future.
Jenny Posted January 4, 2005 Report Posted January 4, 2005 I think we all feel this way one time or another, and Marz has captured the feeling excellently. You have a gift, Marz.
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