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I am a defender of Kanye West about 55% of the time, but this line is just one of the worst, and unfortunately it's from one of his best songs (Jesus Walks)

"For the victims of wellfare for we livin' in hell here...hell yeah"

the first two rhymes would have worked, but why'd he have to throw in "hell yeah" to rhyme with "hell here?" It just doesn't make any sense since living on wellfare isn't something to say "hell yeah" about.

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another bad one:

"ayo for yayo

walk around with yayo

all up in my nayz-yo

i musta been craze yo"

i have no problem with making up words like "nayzyo" or "craze yo" because they obviously mean "nasal" and "crazy" and they had to change them to make them rhyme. it doesn't even bother me that he rhymed yayo with yayo. i just think the line "walk around with yayo" is weird because it doesn't imply that he's snorting the yay or selling it or anything, it just puts the image in mind of some guy walking around holding a bag of coke.

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There's a fine line between awful and brilliant here. For instance:

Brilliant:

"Last Child" by Aerosmith

"Take me back to a south Tallahassee

Down cross the bridge to my sweet sassafrassy"

Awful:

"Cherish" by Madonna

"Romeo and Juliet

they never felt this way, I bet"

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There's a fine line between awful and brilliant here. For instance:

Brilliant:

"Last Child" by Aerosmith

"Take me back to a south Tallahassee

Down cross the bridge to my sweet sassafrassy"

True brilliance, indeed!

I've been always quite fond of this quote by ZZ Top:

"I've gotten used to missin' her

I practice all the time

While I drive the Pan Am highway through

With that cactus friend o' mine"

Hard to beat the "sweet sassafrassy" though.

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Awful?...hmm, ... still thinking . . .

Okay:

How 'bout, "We're an American Band?"

Like...um... duhoy!

Good song, nevertheless! But the sheer obviousness ruins it.

Wait a minute! Here's one even worse! . . .

"Well I'm ... hot-blooded, check it and see

Got a fever of a hundred and three."

I think it's horribly, as well as terribly, awful.

I've always considered that Foreigner would have better served as corn farmers than songwriters.

Not taking away from the band as a whole, though.

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My kid explained this to me. Let me see if I get it right.

"Dougie" was an '80s rapper, Doug E Fresh, and I guess he was a good dancer, and I think my kid said he is dead now... but evidently "to Dougie" means to dance with swagger. Or something like that. :goof:

There's also a song out there in the hip-hop world called "Teach Me How To Dougie." I have had to endure listening to that one more than I can stomach.

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Arguably, the most egregious series of rhyme crimes known to song were perpetrated by just one band.

'Cause I understand you've been running from the man

That goes by the name of the Sandman

He flies the sky like an eagle in the eye

Of a hurricane that's abandoned ~ Sandman, America

But Oz never did give nothing to the Tin Man

That he didn't, didn't already have

and Cause never was the reason for the evening

Or the Tropic of Sir Galahad ~ Tin Man, America

After nine days, I let the horse run free,

'Cause the desert had turned to sea.

There were plants and birds, and rocks and things,

There was sand and hills and rings.

The ocean is a desert, with its life underground,

And a perfect disguise above.

Under the cities lies, a heart made of ground,

But the humans will give no love. ~ A Horse With No Name, America

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let's not forget this America classic:

'Cause the free wind is blowing through your hair

and the days surround your daylight there

seasons crying, no despair

alligator lizards in the air.

The rhymes are all spot-on, the the words, man, the words... :puppyeyes:

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