TheLizard Posted December 6, 2007 Report Share Posted December 6, 2007 Keep droning, world All we’ve ever done is music We will die, and buildings will crumble We will die, and paintings will fade We will die, and decisions won’t matter But the music remains Hurtling through the cosmos Until it intercepts a passing individual Lucky enough not to live here Lucky enough to know us Only by our music So keep droning, world It’s all we have Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLizard Posted December 7, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 7, 2007 Anyone? If you don't like it, you can say so... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Farin Posted December 7, 2007 Report Share Posted December 7, 2007 I almost never answer post in this forum, because I know absolutely zero about poetry, but this one reminded me of this picture and the quote "Sometimes I think the surest sign that intelligent life exists elsewhere in the universe is that none of it has tried to contact us." (Calvin) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shawna Posted December 7, 2007 Report Share Posted December 7, 2007 I like it, Tim... I'm just not smart enough to understand it completely, I think... I'll have another read over the weekend when my mind is a little more awake and see if that makes me more intelligent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Levis Posted December 7, 2007 Report Share Posted December 7, 2007 I get it, I like it... only I see a bit of conflict between 'drone' and 'music'. Either 'music' is 'sound' or 'drone' is 'hum' ... something like that? Of course, it's quite possible that I don't get it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blind-fitter Posted December 8, 2007 Report Share Posted December 8, 2007 It's good. It has existentialist undertones. You have something to say, which you do succinctly, yet in a slightly oblique way. You manage to convey both bleak cynicism and vague hope simultaneously, which isn't such an easy trick to pull off in a short verse. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLizard Posted December 8, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 8, 2007 Thanks bf! That's what I was going for (although I must admit I had to look up what oblique means ). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jenny Posted December 10, 2007 Report Share Posted December 10, 2007 I like it, Tim. I think it makes a nice statement about being unique and not just following the crowd. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted December 12, 2007 Report Share Posted December 12, 2007 Although we all know hopelessness and that feeling of being on the losing end of the fishing pole, occasionally we hear something that counters that bleak scenario. I didn't catch the name of the song, but over the weekend I heard the ironically plaintive voice of a young lady who sang the refrain, "In the end, only kindness matters." I liked that challenge. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted December 13, 2007 Report Share Posted December 13, 2007 Challenge? Natural, which make this entry a good example. Fine writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jenny Posted December 13, 2007 Report Share Posted December 13, 2007 I didn't catch the name of the song, but over the weekend I heard the ironically plaintive voice of a young lady who sang the refrain, "In the end, only kindness matters." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted December 13, 2007 Report Share Posted December 13, 2007 Challenge? When I contemplate the world, in broadbrush and in abstract, I sense kindness toward one another to be a very large challenge. Yes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blind-fitter Posted December 14, 2007 Report Share Posted December 14, 2007 I didn't really get Farin and Jenny's connotations of "lemming-like" behaviour, or following / stepping out from the the crowd. Those didn't really occur to me at all. I interpreted "the drone" in a figurative sense, as "the music of everyday life"; the sounds we make, wherever we are and whatever our social / political circumstances, which distinguish us as a species. But also, thinking more literally; the music that we make, have made and will continue to make throughout our earthbound history is the one constant that transcends all geographical, historical and political boundaries. Were all our music- in all its diverse forms- to be played simultaneously, with all other extraneous noise excluded, the result would be an extreme form of what I believe scientists refer to as "white noise". This would likely be an unlistenable cacophany, but, when heard from outer space, would present as a "drone". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLizard Posted December 14, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 14, 2007 Yeah, b-f definitely gets what I was going for with this one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted December 20, 2007 Report Share Posted December 20, 2007 lemming-like" I'll agree, why do they jump off *cliffs, or, why does it make a fresh beverage??? Most importantly, why are real lemons used in chemicals and fake ones in what we ingest? *LEMMINGS Damned tiny rodent! Strange world, indeed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted December 20, 2007 Report Share Posted December 20, 2007 Yeah, b-f definitely gets what I was going for with this one. This is indicative of success for a stenographer. A creative writer should desire the reader get what they were "going for." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted December 20, 2007 Report Share Posted December 20, 2007 stenographer I must admit, I wouldn't want to appear everyday in a court of law, with a judge who's convinced he/she has it all figured out! Plus the funny way they type! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shawna Posted December 21, 2007 Report Share Posted December 21, 2007 Plus the funny way they type! BLORNT (believe it or not) Muzik, we LOVE that we type funny. We use words that make no sense to others, and speak in code. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted December 29, 2007 Report Share Posted December 29, 2007 Code's nice. As long as it's not taken the wrong way. Hopefully, never. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Viaene Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 I like it Lizard the only cultural thing all races and ages have in common is music, everyone makes music so that would indeed be the thing we need to send to a passing individual in the cosmos (that's the way I understand it) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucky Posted January 11, 2008 Report Share Posted January 11, 2008 I haven't visited down here for a bit. I like this Tim. It seems that the "drone" is actually the sounds of the world, and the lives in it. The continuity that sound, that makes it the music of life. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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