Mairi Posted February 27, 2005 Report Posted February 27, 2005 New poem by me, written last night. Comments please. Ugliest I gaze into the motionless pond Out of spite, not vanity I look younger More naïve Easily decieved No make-up: natural My face, a blank canvas because it's so much easier to hate myself when i'm at my ugliest I look down at the image trapped Out of morbid fascination I look like i always do Fatter than her Bigger than her No muscle: just putrid flab my body, a hideous monster because it's so much easier to hate myself when i'm at my ugliest I look deeper to find the soul reflected within Out of wistful instinct I look at the bigger picture I'm human I have emotions No magical forcefield:I hurt My soul dented by your insults because it's so much easier for you to hate me Hate me more than yourselves when i'm at my ugliest. Comments most appriciated please.
Earth-Angel Posted February 27, 2005 Report Posted February 27, 2005 Mairi, your writing is always so driven and focused. It hurts to read it, because it is true. You've captured that vulnerability perfectly.
Karhul Posted February 27, 2005 Report Posted February 27, 2005 I liked it, but it doesn't make me feel happy. I think I'm ugly too, but people told me that i'm not. I used to get so depressed because I thought I was so ugly. Everyone is almost never satisfied with themselves. I look deeper to find the soul reflected within, Out of wistful instinct I love this line of it. It's speaks about how I feel about myself sometimes. Well done Mairi. Don't take this the wrong way, but I'd like to see a happy poem from you, it would be really good!!!.
Mairi Posted February 27, 2005 Author Report Posted February 27, 2005 I do write happy poems/songs, they just suck.
Karhul Posted February 27, 2005 Report Posted February 27, 2005 I do write happy poems/songs, they just suck. Maybe if I wrote a sad poem, it would suck, but I'll try sometime!!!.
Mairi Posted February 27, 2005 Author Report Posted February 27, 2005 I think it's to do with the kind of person you are inside. I'm a sad person who hides behind a happy exterior and your a little ray of sunshine. We write about different things because we don't understand the opposite fully.
pete38890 Posted February 28, 2005 Report Posted February 28, 2005 sometimes i catch myself lingering at the mirror: we are all of us so vain, so critical. (what is that new wrinkle? why does the goddess say i'm so attractive?) but more often i wonder who is it staring back?
Karhul Posted February 28, 2005 Report Posted February 28, 2005 Hi pete, welcome to Songfacts. And no, I wouldn't bring a razor around with me. Enjoy yourself, and your dinner tonight.
edna Posted February 28, 2005 Report Posted February 28, 2005 Oh, mairi, I saw your pictures on the Photograph Thread and I wouldn´t say you´re ugly at all... could it be I need glasses??? See, I´m concerned about my sight more than about your poem! I did like your poem very much. I guess the mirror is reflecting your feeling...
_Laurie_ Posted February 28, 2005 Report Posted February 28, 2005 Mairi...Why so sad?...very well written, you are expressing your feelings, which is good....you obviously have talent and that's something to feel good about...if writing makes you feel good, than I bet there are some positive feelings inside of you, I'd like to see that in your writings, and I bet they would be beautiful.....
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