Mairi 0 Report post Posted October 28, 2004 hey, me again! ahahahahaha all your praise is making me post more and more! it's a poem thingy i wrote in June Through Through the clarity of unglassed windows drizzled with tears of pain Through the darkness of doors leading to Destruction and creation as one When will i see you again? When will i be me again? In my mind, everything i say is in doubt In their eyes Justice is either with or without proof that the only critisism i allow myself is self-critisism because i cant bear myself Through the brightness of shadows Curtained with envy and greed Through the stillness of movement hearing the silence scream as it slices the air When will i see you be freed? When will i see me be freed? Through the outside of inside the upside of down through the sunshine of thunder Through the smile of a frown When will i see me again? When will you find me again? When will you save me again? (i was listening to Californication a LOT when i wrote this) :happybanana: post your thoughts please! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jenny 2 Report post Posted October 29, 2004 I really like it a lot. Keep writing, Mairi! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Report post Posted October 29, 2004 Thankyou, i was starting to think everyone really hated it coz no one replied to it :happybanana: Jenny, you're cool! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Danielj 1 Report post Posted October 29, 2004 I like it a lot. My favorite of yours. :: Very witty Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
_Annabelle_ 0 Report post Posted October 29, 2004 Very cool, good job, Marz! :happybanana: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RBB 0 Report post Posted October 30, 2004 Great job, I love the second part of the song.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Earth-Angel 0 Report post Posted October 30, 2004 Marz, I just can't tell you enough - your writing is really, really something to be proud of! Through the clarity of unglassed windows drizzled with tears of pain Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Addictedtoclassic 1 Report post Posted October 30, 2004 You can really "feel" this song. Very nice! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jillianne 0 Report post Posted October 30, 2004 Very nice Marry, good job chicken And a bannanaby for you..:happybanana: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Report post Posted October 30, 2004 hee hee hee i love you guys, you're so nice! :happybanana: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
