blind-fitter Posted September 11, 2008 Report Posted September 11, 2008 The cul-de sac Smelt like a recent bereavement. Curtains drawn, Oblivious to the colour in their midst FOR FIFTEEN YEARS Spitting cats, Arched backs, vengeful for their loss. Lines drawn In paint one restive night. Territorial, like. BUT borders can be breached, And guards notoriously lax. Lips pursed, they bitterly regret The detritus this neighbourhood attracts. Darkness brings no respite, no relief. Insinuated by the infernal drill. The drip...drip...drip...drip...drip Of the leaking gutter of a recent divorcee Drum, drum, drumming upon his window-sill. A gate can easily be left ajar, As the hapless father now knows to his cost. In the path of an accelerating car The most fervent-beating heart may quick be lost. The cul-de-sac Smelt like a cremation. Acrid pall, Futile recrimination cast across the fences By the breeze Fingers crooked Point, accusing. Voices ever shriller resonate Within smothering walls. Meantime, her own decline, The unravelling we neither hear nor see... Possessed by the eternal, infernal drill. The drip...drip...drip, The leaking gutter of a distracted divorcee.
Jenny Posted September 11, 2008 Report Posted September 11, 2008 Wow. This is quite a powerful piece, b-f.
Earth-Angel Posted September 11, 2008 Report Posted September 11, 2008 That is! It's quite a story in a few lines.
Shawna Posted September 11, 2008 Report Posted September 11, 2008 I love this, B-F. It's a veritable assault on the senses. I can almost smell the cul-de-sac. I've read this several times, and each time I'm struck by the eloquence of your words, and likewise the disturbing content. A work of art, to be sure... and one that leaves me feeling like I've entered a suburb of "The Shining."
Steel2Velvet Posted September 11, 2008 Report Posted September 11, 2008 Good work. A thought-provoking story within verse.
Lucky Posted September 12, 2008 Report Posted September 12, 2008 I love reading this. I read it at 5am this morning, and twice again just now. Each time something different has attracted me. Great work Mr. Fitter!
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