The Stranger

[Rayzor]

In an old wooden chair near the bed,

She sits beside me,

A young girl with blonde hair,

And eyes blue as the sea.

She speaks to me ever softly,

And touches my hand.

I'm not sure what to say to her,

But pretend to understand.

I'm not sure if this young girl has seen,

Me before today,

But she suddenly wraps her arms around

Me in embrace.

I don't know how to react,

I pat her back in disbelief.

"Sorry grandpa," she says,

"But I really have to leave."

[Shawna]

Love your stuff, Ray! again, took me by surprise at the end. You are the master at the turn-of-phrase that takes you down unexpected paths.

[TheLizard]

This was the saddest damn thing I've ever read. I'm gonna be bummed for the rest of the day. Which means you did a great job, Ray.

[Rayzor]

Glad you kids enjoyed it. And I'm only partially sorry that I bummed you out TimLizzy!

[Steel2Velvet]

Would have been nice to see you develop it for maybe one more stanza before that last one. Nice stuff, Ray.

[_Laurie_]

Very nice...

[Lucky]

Ray, this is so very good ..... like Tim, I could just cry. It's so sad, so quick, but the sentiment is so beautiful. I absolutely love it.

[Rayzor]

S2V: I tried to make something up for the middle part of this poem but this was all of the visit I witnessed...

The greatest prose comes from personal trials

[Rayzor]

RIP Poppa (1930-2012). This is yours now.

No "goodbye", just "see you later".

[Lucky]

..... and I like (understand?) the change in your signature. Deserves another .

[Rayzor]

Thanks Lucky. Sorry took so long but I was avoiding this thread for awhile.

Damn... just read this poem again and I nearly cried. Stupid poets...

Edited June 11, 2012 by Guest
Edit? Me? No!

[BrilliantDisguise]

This one hit home. Very nice writing.