A Hole in One

[MuzikTyme 0]

When was the very first thought?

Why was the second in fear?

What was the third voice?

Where answered here!

There was no choice!

That which brought

Those that taught

Then to exclaim . . .

Who has a name?

Whom's your *daddy?

Them, one?

Better than none?

It's only fun . . .

A hole-in-one?

It's done!

Never hire a *caddy. . .

[Red Fish 0]

i thought it was really good your imagry was astounding although i think it could use more periods yah know like .............. so you can add more dramtic tension to your poetic license

[johnnyguitar 0]

Reminds me of a poem I once wrote about a pair of golfing socks...and how I had to throw them away...because I had a hole in one.

jx

[Viaene 0]

I like it Muziktyme, it's very linguistic, you choose your words carefully, you manage to put in regular rhymes, alliterations,.. The stuff I find attractive to poetry (besides it's meaning).

And you end with humour (at least to me), I can always appreciate that

[Lucky 5]

Think about it, many of Muzik's posts are just little pieces of poetry. I like it! It seems vauge, but in the end cuts straight to the point.

[Red Fish 0]

i wanted to post again and say i liked it!

[MuzikTyme 0]

Keep on posting, Nammy. And thanks.

Reminds me of a poem I once wrote about a pair of golfing socks...and how I had to throw them away...because I had a hole in one.

John, hopefully you've updated your golf-sock collection since! If not then I suggest talking to Uncle Joe!

alliterations

Check out the big brain on Sébastien!!! Thanks, bro.

Muzik's posts are just little pieces of poetry.

I couldn't have possibly gathered a better compliment! Thank you, Lucky!

[blind-fitter 0]

I'm wondering if your "whom" affectation once got you laid, or something: you slip it in with such alarming frequency.

You know, as well as I, that you invariably use "whom" incorrectly; so why do you persist? Whom are you trying to impress?

[Steel2Velvet 0]

Obviously not youm.

[MuzikTyme 0]

^ Touché !