MuzikTyme 0 Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 When was the very first thought? Why was the second in fear? What was the third voice? Where answered here! There was no choice! That which brought Those that taught Then to exclaim . . . Who has a name? Whom's your *daddy? Them, one? Better than none? It's only fun . . . A hole-in-one? It's done! Never hire a *caddy. . . Link to post Share on other sites
Red Fish 0 Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 i thought it was really good your imagry was astounding although i think it could use more periods yah know like .............. so you can add more dramtic tension to your poetic license Link to post Share on other sites
johnnyguitar 0 Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 Reminds me of a poem I once wrote about a pair of golfing socks...and how I had to throw them away...because I had a hole in one. jx Link to post Share on other sites
Viaene 0 Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 I like it Muziktyme, it's very linguistic, you choose your words carefully, you manage to put in regular rhymes, alliterations,.. The stuff I find attractive to poetry (besides it's meaning). And you end with humour (at least to me), I can always appreciate that Link to post Share on other sites
Lucky 5 Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Think about it, many of Muzik's posts are just little pieces of poetry. I like it! It seems vauge, but in the end cuts straight to the point. Link to post Share on other sites
Red Fish 0 Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 i wanted to post again and say i liked it! Link to post Share on other sites
MuzikTyme 0 Posted June 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Keep on posting, Nammy. And thanks. Reminds me of a poem I once wrote about a pair of golfing socks...and how I had to throw them away...because I had a hole in one. John, hopefully you've updated your golf-sock collection since! If not then I suggest talking to Uncle Joe! alliterations Check out the big brain on Sébastien!!! Thanks, bro. Muzik's posts are just little pieces of poetry. I couldn't have possibly gathered a better compliment! Thank you, Lucky! Link to post Share on other sites
blind-fitter 0 Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 I'm wondering if your "whom" affectation once got you laid, or something: you slip it in with such alarming frequency. You know, as well as I, that you invariably use "whom" incorrectly; so why do you persist? Whom are you trying to impress? Link to post Share on other sites
Steel2Velvet 0 Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Obviously not youm. Link to post Share on other sites
MuzikTyme 0 Posted June 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 ^ Touché ! Link to post Share on other sites
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