MuzikTyme Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 When was the very first thought? Why was the second in fear? What was the third voice? Where answered here! There was no choice! That which brought Those that taught Then to exclaim . . . Who has a name? Whom's your *daddy? Them, one? Better than none? It's only fun . . . A hole-in-one? It's done! Never hire a *caddy. . . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Fish Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 i thought it was really good your imagry was astounding although i think it could use more periods yah know like .............. so you can add more dramtic tension to your poetic license Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
johnnyguitar Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 Reminds me of a poem I once wrote about a pair of golfing socks...and how I had to throw them away...because I had a hole in one. jx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Viaene Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 I like it Muziktyme, it's very linguistic, you choose your words carefully, you manage to put in regular rhymes, alliterations,.. The stuff I find attractive to poetry (besides it's meaning). And you end with humour (at least to me), I can always appreciate that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucky Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Think about it, many of Muzik's posts are just little pieces of poetry. I like it! It seems vauge, but in the end cuts straight to the point. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Fish Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 i wanted to post again and say i liked it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted June 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Keep on posting, Nammy. And thanks. Reminds me of a poem I once wrote about a pair of golfing socks...and how I had to throw them away...because I had a hole in one. John, hopefully you've updated your golf-sock collection since! If not then I suggest talking to Uncle Joe! alliterations Check out the big brain on Sébastien!!! Thanks, bro. Muzik's posts are just little pieces of poetry. I couldn't have possibly gathered a better compliment! Thank you, Lucky! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blind-fitter Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 I'm wondering if your "whom" affectation once got you laid, or something: you slip it in with such alarming frequency. You know, as well as I, that you invariably use "whom" incorrectly; so why do you persist? Whom are you trying to impress? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Obviously not youm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted June 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 ^ Touché ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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