Blue Fish Posted May 20, 2007 Report Share Posted May 20, 2007 A wooden Horse made A little girl born A wooden horse given A little girl smiled A young girl runs home A wooden horse on the mantelpiece A young girl strokes it, tender A wooden horse Shiny, bright. A wooden horse dusty A teenage girl far away A wooden horse missed A teenage girl cries A young woman runs home A wooden horse in the attic A young woman lost A wooden horse, found A wooden horse cradled close A woman in black morns A wooden horse polished by tears A woman in black sprinkles the earth A woman left alone by death A wooden horse tarnished by age A woman with one friend left A wooden horse on the mantelpiece A wooden horse falls An old woman dies A wooden horse breaks An old Woman, free. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rayzor Posted May 20, 2007 Report Share Posted May 20, 2007 Bloof, great job! Reading this I'd never guess you were 17. I love how you keep the horse and the girl/woman both growing together in their own way. Very nice piece of writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jenny Posted May 21, 2007 Report Share Posted May 21, 2007 I like it, too. Very well written, Bloof. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Fish Posted May 21, 2007 Author Report Share Posted May 21, 2007 Thankyou both! I don't really aim to do things with my poems, they are just as surpriseing to me when I read them trust me! i just pick up a pen and it flows. I do like the mirroring of the girl in the horse though....I like my pen! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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