The Peak

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I have no transcended mere walking

Now at gorgeoius skies I am gawking

Sarcastic voices dn't seem mocking

All is right, to me crowds are flocking

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Now I feel far better than fine

I can see you now, I know you're mine

I've got my priorities in line

Your happy thoughts are more than sunshine

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

I'm soaring faster now, through the sky

With you, I never have to say 'bye'

I'm comfortable, don't have to lie

Within your gaze, I'm not the fall guy

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Why are you hovering over me?

Your hands on my face, drenched in red tea

There are stars as far as I can see

You weep "I've come to set you free"

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

My mind, it feels so clean, been bleached white

Flying through the clouds, the lights so bright

I've been bestowed with new mental might

You're starring, Why? Givin' me a fright

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

My fingers feel new and nubile

My whole body feels fresh, in style

I want to stay like this for a while

I Never want to turn this dial

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

The clouds have now become my pillow

I lie blanketed by willow

My breeze provided by wind's bellow

I see you there, like the first "hello"

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Sleeping now, in my heavenly bed

I wonder, "how to here was I led"

Your clear eyes, look shocked, something I said?

Suddenly it dawns "My God, I'm dead!'

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Blood pours from my limp body like rain

I wonder "What in life did I gain"

This can't be it, my final refrain.

Strange, with you here, I feel no pain.

Okay, I really like this one for two reasons

1)It's a completely different style for me, and plus the endings kind of morbid (who saw it comin? )

2)One of two things I've printed here that has a definate ending (Out of Time being the other one that I've printed here, there's only like two others and they aren't very good)

[Jillianne 0]

[scott 0]

Thank you, I like it too, which is saying something because it is very rare when I actually enjoy reading something that I wrote, most of the time when I read my own work I get a little pain in my stomach , but not this one!I suppose the reason I like it is because of all the different meanings I put into it (there's the metaphorical sense to it, but then there's also the litteral story of someone dying.)

Thanks again Gillian.

[Jillianne 0]

Exactly, thats why I liked it too, it kept me intrested

[scott 0]

Yeah each verse if you look back contains at least one clue (some more subtle then others) to what has actually happened.

[Jillianne 0]

Aaha clever....subliminal (sp?) advertising eh? ::

[scott 0]

Well not so much advertising ::, but I guess you could look at it that way.

[scott 0]

Once again it looks like it's just going to be you and me carrying the whole freakin' creative writing forum(unless Bobo pops in ) Seriously why doesn't anybody else post here reguarily?

[Jillianne 0]

yeah sure, we all know your gonna become a famous rocker, just dont forget the little people ::

[scott 0]

Yeah, me and my big head.

[Jillianne 0]

Yeah I know, hey you should do your subliminal advertising thingie to lure them on here ::

Once again it looks like it's just going to be you and me carrying the whole freakin' creative writing forum(unless Bobo pops in ) Seriously why doesn't anybody else post here reguarily?

[scott 0]

Okay I'll try, check out the random thoughts post in the random thoughts forum, the best is no one will know my ploy because no one goes to this forum!

[Jillianne 0]

Muah ha ha ha.....little do they know...bahahaha, go on do a sub ad

[scott 0]

Yes, it was so perfect and subtle, they won't know what has come over them when they read it.

[Jillianne 0]

yes ive added to it...Muah ha ha

[scott 0]

Yes I predict a sudden, unexplainable surge in the attendence of this forum. Heeheehee

[Jillianne 0]

Yes, I feel a presance alright..muah ha ha, uhoh i hope they dont see this thread...quick scatter

[scott 0]

Yes, I feel a presance alright..muah ha ha, uhoh i hope they dont see this thread...quick scatter

Wow at least this one didn't get as out of hand as the "Bridging the Void" thread, how many pages was that again?

[Jillianne 0]

yeah bout, fifty million squillion bubillion, correct me if im wrong ::

[scott 0]

Sounds 'bout right, it's threads like this one and "Bridging the Void" that I really wish more people would show up, because no offense, but pages and pages by just the same two people, just a wee bit pathetic.

[Jillianne 0]

yeah Scott, its all your fault, what happened to the sub ads? huh? Buffoon! ::

[scott 0]

I'm sorry I thought they'd work! Maybe they only will if they read the message repeatedly over and over.

[scott 0]

Aha, I just checked the "Who's online" and Sara's here, so maybe my subliminal messages did work, I'm not a buffoon after all.

P.S. Sara I'm sorry for involving you in our incredibly stupid conversation.

[Jillianne 0]

muah ha ha our plan has worked...UIREEKA!!

[scott 0]

Yes I know, we're brilliant!