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I have no transcended mere walking

Now at gorgeoius skies I am gawking

Sarcastic voices dn't seem mocking

All is right, to me crowds are flocking

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Now I feel far better than fine

I can see you now, I know you're mine

I've got my priorities in line

Your happy thoughts are more than sunshine

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

I'm soaring faster now, through the sky

With you, I never have to say 'bye'

I'm comfortable, don't have to lie

Within your gaze, I'm not the fall guy

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Why are you hovering over me?

Your hands on my face, drenched in red tea

There are stars as far as I can see

You weep "I've come to set you free"

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

My mind, it feels so clean, been bleached white

Flying through the clouds, the lights so bright

I've been bestowed with new mental might

You're starring, Why? Givin' me a fright

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

My fingers feel new and nubile

My whole body feels fresh, in style

I want to stay like this for a while

I Never want to turn this dial

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

The clouds have now become my pillow

I lie blanketed by willow

My breeze provided by wind's bellow

I see you there, like the first "hello"

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Sleeping now, in my heavenly bed

I wonder, "how to here was I led"

Your clear eyes, look shocked, something I said?

Suddenly it dawns "My God, I'm dead!'

Come along with me, no longer weak

How you tell when you find what you seek:

When you reach the point that you can't speak

Then I can welcome you to the peak

Blood pours from my limp body like rain

I wonder "What in life did I gain"

This can't be it, my final refrain.

Strange, with you here, I feel no pain.

Okay, I really like this one for two reasons

1)It's a completely different style for me, and plus the endings kind of morbid (who saw it comin? :jester:)

2)One of two things I've printed here that has a definate ending (Out of Time being the other one that I've printed here, there's only like two others and they aren't very good)

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:bow: :bow: :bow:

Thank you, I like it too, which is saying something because it is very rare when I actually enjoy reading something that I wrote, most of the time when I read my own work I get a little pain in my stomach :laughing:, but not this one!I suppose the reason I like it is because of all the different meanings I put into it (there's the metaphorical sense to it, but then there's also the litteral story of someone dying.)

Thanks again Gillian. :thumbsup:

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Yeah I know, hey you should do your subliminal advertising thingie to lure them on here ::

Once again it looks like it's just going to be you and me carrying the whole freakin' creative writing forum(unless Bobo pops in :laughing:) Seriously why doesn't anybody else post here reguarily?
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