Mairi 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 yeh another song seeing as i kinda promised. all my songs worth showing are about death and/or depression hmm that makes me ponder :: anyhoo, enjoy and please post your comments (it's a song and was written in march. if you wanna know what it goes like, listen to Evanescence "Everybody's fool" thats what music i based it on) Final Rebellion She crouches in the corner Of a dark room She sits with a notebook Contemplating ways to stop her mounting doom She clutches the dagger her final release Chorus Why is this the last resort? How could she ever even have thought The only way of letting people know is letting go, her final rebellion Under her pasty skin the wounds show through they open up and spurt the venom the snake of depression, so blue her tears cascade down her chin she picks up the pen and begins Chorus The words flow onto the paper eerily easily forming a letter Oh how she's sorry for the pain this will cause but she couldn't hold on any longer because her depression took over and blinded her sight and now she will wait for the endless night Chorus That's it. i would appreciate it very much if you post your comments and tell me what ya think. i will leave you with a happy banana (Bananaby!) :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
Jillianne 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 That's excellent Marz!! Well done!! I really enjoyed that! "The words flow onto the paper eerily easily forming a letter" That was really well put.. (hey bannanby is MY name : :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 thank you Gilliann(or Jillianne, which do you prefer?) and im sorry about bannanaby, its such a cute name! :happybanana: there he goes,dancing again! im thinking of writing another song today as i have had a rather crap day at school Link to post Share on other sites
Jillianne 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 LOL, its okay, Eh well, I hate my name, so whatever lol, uh you should..yesh.. I'm on my midterm holidays, wuw, yeah so no school for me! But seriously, you should! Do it for bannanaby :happybanana: you know you cant resist his/her? face.. Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 yes, his devilish grin gets me everytime...... :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
Jillianne 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 Aw, I was hoping it was a her :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 i thought banabanabsnby was a boy name :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
_Annabelle_ 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 Awesome, very vivid, good job Marz!! More bananas for you :happybanana: :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 why thank you :happybanana: no one is posting much tonight Link to post Share on other sites
Earth-Angel 0 Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 You really write so well, I can't wait for more! Link to post Share on other sites
marko90 0 Posted October 28, 2004 Report Share Posted October 28, 2004 Congrats on another hit!! your officially past one hit wonder!!! GREAT JOB!!! you put my writting to shame and I'm 18 freakin years old!!! anyways well done, Mairi!! Link to post Share on other sites
Mairi 0 Posted October 28, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 28, 2004 awww sweet, sweet people on these board-y type things, im away to get my diary.... :happybanana: Link to post Share on other sites
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