marko90 Posted February 12, 2005 Report Share Posted February 12, 2005 Here is my newest peice, still about my break up... LEFT ME [Verse 1] Now I?m left bleeding You were so misleading Why did you leave this alone? Leaving me here to morn {Chorus} You heart was ice cold Now I have to break this mold You left me wondering why Taking all ability for me to fly All I have left to do is cry [Verse 2] You tore my heart out Leaving a hole, This is taking its tole You took that knife, You put it right through There is nothing left for me to do {Chorus} You heart was ice cold Now I have to break this mold You left me wondering why Taking all ability for me to fly All I have left to do is cry [Verse 3] How can you say this is so right? When it only feels wrong You took me, and you shook me I have been sent for a loop {Chorus} You heart was ice cold Now I have to break this mold You left me wondering why Taking all ability for me to fly All I have left to do is cry ((Fading out)) How can you say this is so right? When it only feels wrong (((REPEAT 2x))) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted February 12, 2005 Report Share Posted February 12, 2005 I liked it, i don't think it was as good as some of your other stuff but in comparison to many other pieces of writing that have graced this board, it was good. (meaning no offence to others, i just want peace on this forum *starts humming*) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Addictedtoclassic Posted February 14, 2005 Report Share Posted February 14, 2005 Obviously very heart-broken about the entire situation. The piece is very icy but filled with emotion. It's pretty good, but I've seen you write better. This is the only line I found that really appears to be out of place and just doesn't sound right. I have been sent for a loop Other than that it sounds all right. Although the patterns change from verse to verse... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RBB Posted February 14, 2005 Report Share Posted February 14, 2005 The song is very good, I know it is. The fact that you feel the subject brings that raw emotion to the table. Overall it's a good job.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uncle Joe Posted February 14, 2005 Report Share Posted February 14, 2005 It's got a good beat. I think I could dance to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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