Mairi Posted January 5, 2005 Report Share Posted January 5, 2005 ok, my writing ha become vey childish and rubbish but this song is probably the most emotionally charged of mine and i've put a lot of effort into it. so go in, insult and criticise all you want. the parts in brackets are sung by a backing singer. Untitled as yet (Possible title"Painful") To hold your hand to be close, so near to you to be just yours there's nothing that i wouldn't do And i'd change everything about myself if it made things alright So i wouldn't cry, not at all during those lonely nights Chorus The tears that form in my eyes can only be caused by you And you could so easily stop them If you wanted to but you just don't need me (Oh jesus christ) but you just don't need me (but you are my vice) For you to call me yours to be wanted, needed by you To be your other half There's nothing that i wouldn't do And I'd kill myself for you If you'd just talk to me I wouldn't wince at all while I'd slowly bleed Chorus you show all the weakness in me you show all the weakness in me you show all the weakness in me *backing singer sings in harmony* (please don't do this to me) you show all the weakness in me (please don't do this to me) you show all the weakness in me (please don't do this to me) you show all the weakness in me (please don't do this to me) YOU SHOW ALL THE WEAKNESS IN ME chorus *whispered* you show all the weakness in me because you are my vice Ok, comments please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Scott-Free Posted January 5, 2005 Report Share Posted January 5, 2005 Mairi, I'm almost speechless..I simply love this song! I want to keep reading it over and over. You definitely have something great here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ender Posted January 5, 2005 Report Share Posted January 5, 2005 wow, that is a great great song, i can relate to it i love it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karhul Posted January 6, 2005 Report Share Posted January 6, 2005 Why don't you call it painfull love?. Try these guitar chords with it, ok?. Not necessarily in order, I just think they would go well with it. Dm, Am, Cmaj7, Bm7, Em, Gm. Tell me what you think ok?. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
marko90 Posted January 6, 2005 Report Share Posted January 6, 2005 That's very good, I enjoyed it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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