Mairi Posted January 1, 2005 Report Posted January 1, 2005 yeh, short poem i wrote on the 29th. Why A gust of wind powering the storm that she walks through it makes her eyes water blinking, she remembers hurt anger betrayal Why her? She falls to the ground Why him? She screams through her internal torment Why love? Thoughts comments and critisism please (and dont say learn to spell critisism because i dont plan to!)
Scott-Free Posted January 3, 2005 Report Posted January 3, 2005 Mairi,This is very well structured and illustrates the emotion very well. I can relate to the poem and that feeling...I love it!! Can't wait to read more!! :rockon:Scott-Free
Jenny Posted January 4, 2005 Report Posted January 4, 2005 Very good, Mairi. You use few words, but they create powerful images...that takes talent, and you've got it. Keep writing.
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