Red Fish Posted July 12, 2008 Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 (edited) hi guys i updated the poem i took you guys advise and used it i hope you like it and i know this poem is politically chagred but please dont let the thread turn into a debate about that thx don't act so refined you can't say that you had tried very hard when you didn't because that'd be just another lie and i'm not satisfied don't act so defined you can't lay that you had tried very hard when you didn't because that'd be just another falsehood and i'm not happy i got you your favorite things but you won't give me mine two-way relationship on a one-way road you stopped for hitchhikers while driving backward but i own these pangs if you don't understand as i'm sure you were just along for the ride that i'm the one hurting inside because i know i'm right i should have been the one to fill your dark soul with light Edited July 13, 2008 by Guest as requested Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poetrychick Posted July 12, 2008 Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 Better, I like it. And sorry for the ridiculousness. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Fish Posted July 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 i decided to change my avatar to better fit with my poem and i think paul liticks is a pretty cool guy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Fish Posted July 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 could someone pelase change my title to "blackest fish" or something cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ombre Vivante Posted July 12, 2008 Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 No. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Fish Posted July 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 *sticks tongue out at bitt and laughs then writes more poetry!!!* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted July 12, 2008 Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 just don't bit the tongue... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Fish Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 better. tiz cooler lkike this..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Uncle Joe Posted July 18, 2008 Report Share Posted July 18, 2008 Pan seared? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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