Keys to Glass Gates

[CaptainMikeRS]

This is my 17th song, written for Jenny and how she saved me from depression. Progressive rock tune.

"Keys to Glass Gates"

(Written February 12, 2005

by Mike R. Smale

© 2005)

Steadfast into the ghostly night,

fresh from a battle without a fight.

Perils ahead, no objective shown,

not a way to return, my future's sown.

I thought that I heard the crying

of a wolf as it stared at the moon.

Vigorously running to freedom

from the city of infinite gloom.

Held within the eye-

within the eye of the seeker.

I feel the growing sun upon my soul,

the glimmering light unlocks

the first keyhole.

Ancient secrets are shared,

but sometimes the truth impairs.

Answers in forgotten runes,

like seeing through the fog of a lagoon.

Trapped within the mind-

within the mind of the mortal man.

I hear the angel's song upon my soul,

serene words that unlock

the second keyhole.

I thought that I heard the crying

of a wolf as it stared at the moon.

Vigorously running to freedom

from the city of infinite gloom.

Held within the soul-

within my very own soul.

I feel your hand upon my heart,

the final key- is you and I.

[Addictedtoclassic]

It has an excellent start to it other than "my future's sown". I'm unsure of your usage of the word "sown" here. The flow is unique and I like how you keep it consistant through-out. It's harder to just read it, but if you "sing" it with a tune in the back of your head it's easier to really "hear" the song. I like it but for some reason this grouping doesn't sound quite right.

Held within the eye-

within the eye of the seeker.

I feel the growing sun upon my soul,

the glimmering light unlocks

the first keyhole.

It could just be the way I'm reading it, but the structure within this verse seems a little out of place compared to the rest of the song.

[CaptainMikeRS]

It has an excellent start to it other than "my future's sown". I'm unsure of your usage of the word "sown" here. The flow is unique and I like how you keep it consistant through-out. It's harder to just read it, but if you "sing" it with a tune in the back of your head it's easier to really "hear" the song. I like it but for some reason this grouping doesn't sound quite right.

It could just be the way I'm reading it, but the structure within this verse seems a little out of place compared to the rest of the song.

The sown means it is planted as in sewing seeds. The somewhat awkward flow in the chorus is due to the fact that it definitely needs to be sung, as it uses a 7/4 and 5/4 alternating time signature, instead of the regualar 4/4 which is the standard time for average speech according to my English teacher.