Paul35621 Posted January 27, 2005 Report Share Posted January 27, 2005 Welcome to the dead zone This is the dead zone Minds blasted consumed spat out Feelings numbed or gone without Cold, unfeeling, manipulative Yet filled with laughter and brightly lit Welcome to the dead zone This is the dead zone Full to the brim yet still wanting Fools for the quick the easy the all encompassing Everything can be done everything achieved Except the thing inside half formed just out of reach Welcome to the dead zone This is the dead zone Love is pure and good it well understood but you heard that all before And you hold back the yawns as your soul is torn but it won?t go away All around you its smiles and bathroom tiles but that won?t satisfy your soul anymore When will it cease Where is she your other half the missing piece? Welcome to the dead zone This is the dead zone And I yean to spurn this cruel churn to break away and be free But this is the world I was born into and nothings gonna undo the time line and the family tree Flashes of light and warmth around the solid rock are all that?s left to guide me But I will carry on regardless and unreservedly and hope and toil to find another soul to join me Welcome to the dead zone as far as I can see but do not give in or inwardly flee Just reach out for my hand baby we?ll do it together. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karhul Posted February 4, 2005 Report Share Posted February 4, 2005 Nice!. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted February 4, 2005 Report Share Posted February 4, 2005 Hey, i really liked the verses but i didn't really care for the part that said Welcome to the dead zone, this is the dead zone i think that should only have been said at the end instead of: Welcome to the dead zone as far as I can see but do not give in or inwardly flee Just reach out for my hand baby we?ll do it together That's just my personal opinion though, i really liked the verses. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Addictedtoclassic Posted February 9, 2005 Report Share Posted February 9, 2005 I like everything but the "Welcome to the dead zone" part between the verses. Although I do like the ending Welcome to the dead zone as far as I can see but do not give in or inwardly flee Just reach out for my hand baby we?ll do it together. You could almost take out the "Welcome to the dead zone" between the verses and stick to the ending which brings the whole poem together and finalizes the picture you are trying to create. Other than that I think it's fantastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul35621 Posted February 21, 2005 Author Report Share Posted February 21, 2005 Minds blasted consumed spat out Feelings numbed or gone without Cold, unfeeling, manipulative Yet filled with laughter and brightly lit Full to the brim yet still wanting Fools for the quick the easy the all encompassing Everything can be done everything achieved Except the thing inside half formed just out of reach Love is pure and good it well understood but you heard that all before And you hold back the yawns as your soul is torn but it won?t go away All around you its smiles and bathroom tiles but that won?t satisfy your soul anymore When will it cease Where is she your other half the missing piece? And I yean to spurn this cruel churn to break away and be free But this is the world I was born into and nothings gonna undo the time line and the family tree Flashes of light and warmth around the solid rock are all that?s left to guide me But I will carry on regardless and unreservedly and hope and toil to find another soul to join me Welcome to the dead zone as far as I can see but do not give in or inwardly flee Just reach out for my hand baby we?ll do it together. Thanks for the advice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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