[poem: shut up]

so...if i take out the "hide away" then it will sound better...alright. thanks for all the advice!

[poem: shut up]

what if i take out the line...i'm losing patience with myself....if i just take that i completely it will make more sense.

[poem: shut up]

please please tell me your honest opinion about this poem. i need to know if it's bad, needs improvement or if it's okay. thanks.

SHUT UP

I'm losing all my control

I just want to go away and hide

Cause I can't stand this pain

My heart is so numb

My blood is so cold

And I'm bleeding so much hate

I want to break free

Cause I'm so sick of this sh*t

So sick of this life

Come on

Look at me straight in the face

Or go behind my back

I don't care

Go ahead

Throw it in my face

Say I'm a bad one

Say I'm a f**k up

Say I'm pathetic

It's true

I know

So shut up

My life's so hard

You think you know

But you don't

You have no f**king idea

What the hell I go through

so shut up

Cause I've had it up to here

I can't take it anymore

I'm on my last thread

Yeah, my head's f**ked up inside

It's true

I know

So shut up

Cause I've had it up to here

I can't take it anymore

I'm on my last thread

So shut up

-JB

[ROCK'S GREATEST SAD SONG??]

i would have to say the saddest rock song is EPIPHANY by STAIND or BLEED by COLD. those songs are incredible.

-JB

"Music is my therapy" -ME

[Poem: I hate you]

please tell me what you think....

I HATE YOU

I hate you

More than you will ever know

I hate you

At first I was just pi*t off

But now I?m so full of hate

I hate you

For all the things you did

I hate you

Cause you?ve hurt me so much

I hate you

Cause you?ve made me cry

I hate you

Cause you?re pushing me away from you

I hate you

Cause you?ve turned my heart completely black and blue

I hate you

And all your stupid lies

I hate you

But most of all I hate the way I don?t hate you

Cause I know deep down I care for you

And I know you?ve helped me so much

So when the day comes for me to see you again

I will be there

But right now I so [bleep] hate you

I hate you

-JB

Rewritten: 2/21/05