My mixed Rainbow.

[Blue Fish]

You’re a strange one you are

You smell like blue

But you feel like red

Your voice is mostly yellow

You’re a strange mix

I don’t know why I see you

In terms of colors

I feel strange, hearing colors

I’m a strange mix.

I think in rainbows

You live in them

My worlds burst like green

But yours is a strange mix

You shift colors like a mirror

Reflecting inner out

And out in

You’re neutral, yet blazing passion

You could be purple

Sometimes you are

I love it when your fire orange

I smell the sea in your hair

I feel wings wrap me tight

In your dark blue moods

But I worried and quite

When you’re brooding white

I wonder how others

Can see a person truly

Do they see in colors?

Or only in black and white?

In you I have a rainbow

I have sea, fire, wings and earth

I have chocolate smiles

I have lemon hugs

When you wrap me in the sea

I smell forests in your hair

A warm comforting knowledge

This is real, this is life

When you’re silver

It makes me weep

You feel like grey

Cold, distant, cruel

When you’re gold

I taste cotton candy,

I smell mint on your smiles

Your golden moods are caramel kisses

My precious rainbow boy

My teasing tasteful feast

You fill me with red wine love

You fill me with honey pain.

Edited May 23, 2007 by Guest
It had the wrong title! opps...:-D

[Kevin]

This is pretty BF , but I think it needs a bit of stanza study and rewrite . An old theme redone , needs a bit more of your personal touch . Good start ! Rethink the title as well - a bit beneath the words you have written .

[Blue Fish]

It's an old theme? really?? I didn't know, it just came to my head at one in the morning...

[Kevin]

Nothing wrong with that : everything 'new ' is old , in some form . Seriously , a little tweaking and you'll have a real beauty here ...

For reference ( and I'm sure there are others I can't think of at the moment )

The Rolling Stones : " She 's a Rainbow "

She comes in colors everywhere;

She combs her hair

She's like a rainbow

Coming colors in the air

Oh, everywhere

She comes in colors

She comes in colors everywhere;

She combs her hair

She's like a rainbow

Coming colors in the air

Oh, everywhere

She comes in colors

Have you seen her dressed in blue

See the sky in front of you

And her face is like a sail

Speck of white so fair and pale

Have you seen the lady fairer

She comes in colors everywhere;

She combs her hair

She's like a rainbow

Coming colors in the air

Oh, everywhere

She comes in colors

Have you seen her all in gold

Like a queen in days of old

She shoots colors all around

Like a sunset going down

Have you seen the lady fairer

She comes in colors everywhere;

She combs her hair

She's like a rainbow

Coming colors in the air

Oh, everywhere

She comes in colors

She's like a rainbow

Coming colors in the air

Oh, everywhere

She comes in colors

[Blue Fish]

yes, difference is i actully DO see people in rainbows... I shall tweak then modify!

[Kevin]

Have you had your eyes checked recently ?

[Blue Fish]

Yes. it's a brain problem.....

[Kevin]

Curiously then , how do you see the world , BF ?

[Blue Fish]

It's a mixture of what colors I smell, hear and feel. I see people and trees, I know trees are useally green, grass is almost always green and all that, but people I don't "see" as "good" "bad" or "annoyed" or "happy" i "see" them as, mostly dark colors (bad people) Like muddy browns, dark dark reds those sort of colors or bright colors (good people) though I do see the physical beings.....

[Lucky]

I do like it Bloof. Maybe you could refine it a little, but in all you've done a good job. I can understand that feeling and seeing in colors as well.

After reading it a second time, I like it more!

Edited June 1, 2007 by Guest