Danielj Posted March 3, 2007 Report Share Posted March 3, 2007 There's a riot of color in my mind You catalysed it with your eyes I used to see in black and white But now I see the red lipstick from our last 'goodnight' I've got a tattoo on the back of my hand That says "You've got to do more than the best you can" That's a paradox, and it's just for you They make me feel as if I have a clue Then a flame's triggered inside me And then you flicker beside me I need someone to guide me Because I just don't know the way You've started exuding everything that I hate It's all just superficial what you contemplate today I bet you wish your life was an utter mess Then you'd bottle it up, just so you could impress Then a flame's triggered inside me Then you flicker beside me Don't really want you to guide me But I need somebody's love. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue Fish Posted March 4, 2007 Report Share Posted March 4, 2007 I like this! Good job! The way you use simple juxpositions (sp?)and contrasts to bring images to the front of the mind is very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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