Bobo Posted July 3, 2004 Report Share Posted July 3, 2004 Okay. I've been playing around with this one for about a month or two or so. I didn't like it as it was, and I'm still not happy about some of it. I'm rewriting the tune to be recorded sometime in September. It's a rather slow, almost spectrally haunting melody that goes along with it, most probably in 6/8 and F major. There's not much to say, except, it's about suicide. Again. I don't know how that works.. At the time, I dug the difference between the simple verses and the disturbingly bad chorus. If you're interested, this was the song I wrote, not directly before Charcoaling Ikebana, but the one before that. The one in the middle was quite filler. *breathes in* Here goes. He tells me you're in love with someone new Tell me it's not so, say it can't be true Until you do, you know from me That my life is good no more Is it suicide, washes over me, a death inside my soul Bathe my heart in you, cleanse and purify, and yet destroy it whole Age of innocence, let my heart be scorched by fire Let me quell its one desire Though my life's been thrown away, know I'm away Where my soul could never tire In a fantastic dream world where inside my head swirled With a love once wild for you An exsanguinous flame lets out my blood again Which was bled and once withdrew I can't express the pain you made me feel Maybe it's not fair and your love's so real Really for me, your love bursts through Though it's kicked back to the ground One day you will know you can't have me back through your silence unprofound Age of innocence... I don't know if my pain dwells deep inside Superficial hurt is your only pride I know tonight you will pretend You don't care what you've lost Only for my life which you threw away - can't get back at any cost Age of innocence... I don't know how this one will be received as it was written quite some time ago, but I hope that it's received well.. Thanks for listening guys. Love and mercy Matt Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted July 5, 2004 Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Matt your extremely talented, sorry im the only one replying **hint hint nudge nudge wink wink** people, but seriously that's amazing, you know you rock Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bobo Posted July 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Yeah, I think that despite the inevitable fact that I cause aversive tendencies amongst many, that it has been scientifically proven by now.. Don't fret though, it doesn't matter that it's not being responded to. Love and mercy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted July 5, 2004 Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Sometimes, a response is not necessary, especially when one is confident of their own merit. Since I'm here though, nice entry Bobo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bobo Posted July 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Maybe it's all that people are just so stunned or something.. stunned into silence as it were. That pays its own compliment. Nobody hates it yet! Love and mercy Matt Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scott Posted July 5, 2004 Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 I can't hold it in any longer, I hate you Bobo and everything you do! All the praise over the months of the forum all fake! -Just kiddin' with ya- :: As usual this was a great post Matt, as high of quality as I've come to expect from you. Keep up the good work. And Gillian you're right, more people need to frequent the "Creative Writing" forum, cause as usual it's just you, Bobo, Muzik, and me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bobo Posted July 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 Gahah! Don't worry, most people can't hold it in any more, so don't worry! I think that more people need to come around this forum, that's for sure. I'll see if I can get more people around to have a glimpse at things. Thanks again! Love and mercy Matt I can't hold it in any longer, I hate you Bobo and everything you do! All the praise over the months of the forum all fake! -Just kiddin' with ya- :: As usual this was a great post Matt, as high of quality as I've come to expect from you. Keep up the good work. And Gillian you're right, more people need to frequent the "Creative Writing" forum, cause as usual it's just you, Bobo, Muzik, and me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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