EagleEye0 Posted January 3, 2007 Report Share Posted January 3, 2007 Kalahari So here I am One last time Alone, like the land Parched dreams Fight over the canteen of hope Bobbling it, spilling it, As I lay The wind whistles silence Though it blows all the time Dust and dismay Upon this half world Violet skies pursue a fleeing sun Colored cacophony flood my eyes A tide of lies washes a mirage of ease Upon the torched shores of my flesh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shawna Posted January 3, 2007 Report Share Posted January 3, 2007 brilliant. I love the imagery. You speak worlds in just a few words and lay the crisply focused photograph neatly at the reader's feet. So desolate. Brilliant. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLizard Posted January 3, 2007 Report Share Posted January 3, 2007 I first read the title as "Kickin in the Calamari" and got an image of a guy drowning in fried squid. Nice job, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EagleEye0 Posted January 24, 2007 Author Report Share Posted January 24, 2007 Thanks. I loove writing, poetry, especially poignant poetry evidenced by the poem above. Every word was carefully measured, every syallable carefully weighed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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