TwilightVampire Posted February 7, 2006 Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 Shattered Mirror the girl standing in front of the mirror wondering what she did wrong to deserve this wondering why its so hard to keep her heart unhurt she wonders what would be best to do Disappear or become shadow so no one can love her She wonders what she did wrong to lose everything She wonders what she could have done to keep it but now she finds nothing to live for,yet she keeps going she keeps walking and moving and putting on some fake happy acts but sometimes she is actually happy The girl standing in front of the mirror wonders why she must be a disgrace why the snow around her melts why the rain turns to ash against her skin why the moon turns black as she walks why the sun hides when she comes out why the fire turns to smoke when she comes The girl standing in front of the mirror wonders why she betrayed herself into thinking she could love anyone when she couldn't even love herself enough to take care of herself she wonders why pain comes to her when she touches rain it turns to ash when the moon shines it turns black when the sun is out it hides when she comes out The Girl standing in the mirror wish's to be someone better someone anyone would love and not ask of favors of her just love her as if she was there own she wish's to be thin yet she can't get the image in her mind to come to play The girl standing in the mirror sees herself as a freak a nobody a no good hellhound sent to destroy earth and humanity why does she wish to be an angel to seek happiness when she can't be who she wants to be The girl standing in the mirror shatters the mirror hating the image in the mirror of who she became she became shadow a creature afraid of people afraid of day afraid of moon afraid of ash and smoke this girl seeks one thing and that is happiness for eternity by,Bec Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
edna Posted February 7, 2006 Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 I find your poem quite revealing... I won´t reffer to the style, just say that I like it. But it shows fears and pain... maybe once the mirror is broken the girl can start again? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwilightVampire Posted February 7, 2006 Author Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 Thnk you Edna Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Foxy Posted February 7, 2006 Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 Bec, have you ever read anything by Sylvia Plath? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwilightVampire Posted February 7, 2006 Author Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 No i never heard of her or him Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Foxy Posted February 7, 2006 Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 http://www.sylviaplath.de/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwilightVampire Posted February 7, 2006 Author Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 hmm the pages of her poems wouldn't work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Foxy Posted February 7, 2006 Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 The links worked for me : http://www.angelfire.com/tn/plath/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwilightVampire Posted February 7, 2006 Author Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 The links worked for me : http://www.angelfire.com/tn/plath/ thnk you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted February 7, 2006 Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 You have some extremely creative phrasing in this piece, Bec. It also contains a grammatic ebb and flow that "mirrors" the ups and downs in the subject's life. You have a skill at transferring emotions in a succinct and poingnant manner. Good work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwilightVampire Posted February 7, 2006 Author Report Share Posted February 7, 2006 You have some extremely creative phrasing in this piece, Bec. It also contains a grammatic ebb and flow that "mirrors" the ups and downs in the subject's life. You have a skill at transferring emotions in a succinct and poingnant manner. Good work! thnk you so much Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shawna Posted February 9, 2006 Report Share Posted February 9, 2006 this poem reminds me so much of what I was like in high school - the most painful time of a girl's life in a lot of ways. It makes me very sad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwilightVampire Posted February 10, 2006 Author Report Share Posted February 10, 2006 Thnk you for the comment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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