scott Posted June 12, 2004 Report Posted June 12, 2004 Here are some lyrics I posted a while ago on the songwriting thread and unfortunately that thread never really got the traffic it deserved(Fight the power Bobo! ) and I figured I'd reprint 'em here, hope you guys don't mind the repeatedness.(is that even a word? ) Okay, one night about a year ago I got really bored so I grabbed a notebook and started writing I've written a *few* little things since then (about three notebooks worth) now about 25% (conservative estimate) really really suck, (I write a lot of them when I'm really tired at about 3 am but every now and then i look at it the next morning and say "hey it isn't god awful!" here's an example (note: I like to write like Michael Stipe(also I like to have fun with my lyrics, like Stipe, they don't have to make that much sense) and Kurt Cobain do/did, which is it doesn't have to follow a strict syllable format, just has to rhyme (mostly) and you can make it fit by articulating it weird)(also I've never let anyone look at my notebooks before so, please don't make fun of me ) so without further ado here's a song about a day passing by that I call "Out Of Time"(yes I was listening to a crap load of R.E.M at the time) I'm out of time the message/ is in this rhyme bleedin' alkaline the night will shine I'm stuck inside sun tries to hide why are you shy? Moon won't get by. I'm still unhappy moon so close to me Froze(n)(in)* the ice the heavens entice turn out the light we'll face the night glowing neon night is gone day is fun save the sun evenings musk will wait 'till dusk Restless evening stars are creeping Break into night pitch black sight the witching hour midnights flower dawn will break the night foresake early morning owls foreboding Meet you in the day you don't have to stay skylit by moon you left so soon scarred by star I know who you are stuck beneath the heavens bet on lucky sevens lost in the stratosphere I won't stay in here Dusk, dusk to dawn dawn to dusk, I'm out of time. *pulled a little Cobain/Vedder there, sweet huh? there it is, if you don't get it listen to R.E.M's "Low" and "E-bow the letter" I was going for that mellow mood. Please don't make fun of me I already know that I'm a dork, whereas if you like it as I said before I have about 210 more(yes, I'm a dork with a lot of time on my hands) Bottom line though, what do you think? ........................................................ Here's another, it's not quite finished, but I'm pretty proud of it, it has pretty good lyric structure, and all that stuff, at the time I was listening to Radiohead and R.E.M (I think that Michael Stipes my idol, but I can't be sure) Not My Boss Sure, you might be so large How does that put you in charge? You govern with fake authority Demonizing the minority Go, ride you magic oil barge 'Cause no one tops your seniority I totally agree with you sarge 50 tons of metal in my garage Chorus: You say that you're the boss In control of all the chaos No,No,No,No,No,No Protest, it goes to show you're not my boss you caused the chaos The great conspiracy plan Great Mother turned and ran One and only natures killer Calm the masses with useless filler passing the buck makes him a man Religion, your supposed pillar Now we can go to Alaska to tan Quite frankly, I just ain't a fan Chorus. There it is so far, I want to add some more verses to it, but I really like it, the lyrics all fit together like a puzzle, but each line is completely standalone and has an entirely different meaning in itself.
beatleant Posted June 14, 2004 Report Posted June 14, 2004 I see you have a penchant for the 'night' and 'sky' (stars, visual night, evenings, etc.). Absolutely nothing wrong with that I love the imagery of poetic words to describe interstellar skies, nocturnal life, etc.
scott Posted June 14, 2004 Author Report Posted June 14, 2004 Thanks dude, I think the reason that most the stuff I write deals with night and stars and stuff is because I write most of them at night outside looking and the sky and stars and stuff :: I find that to be a great insperation(I also take out my CD player and about 25 of my CDs (I have many many more) and just listen to 'em. It's really a great way to relax. As far as the poetic stuff goes, I really love writing like that, vague, weird descriptions can be some of the best descriptions in my book(if you can follow me ) Thanks for the 'props'
TheCyberdemon Posted June 14, 2004 Report Posted June 14, 2004 Do you live in a nice suburbian or nice farm land area? I usually can't see but the brightest stars, in my neighborhood. I remember going to the family beach house and sitting on the deck with no stupid lights on, a nice cool breeze, and crickets chirping. It was truely insperational.
Jillianne Posted June 16, 2004 Report Posted June 16, 2004 Here are some lyrics I posted a while ago on the songwriting thread and unfortunately that thread never really got the traffic it deserved(Fight the power Bobo! ) and I figured I'd reprint 'em here, hope you guys don't mind the repeatedness.(is that even a word? ) Okay, one night about a year ago I got really bored so I grabbed a notebook and started writing I've written a *few* little things since then (about three notebooks worth) now about 25% (conservative estimate) really really suck, (I write a lot of them when I'm really tired at about 3 am but every now and then i look at it the next morning and say "hey it isn't god awful!" here's an example (note: I like to write like Michael Stipe(also I like to have fun with my lyrics, like Stipe, they don't have to make that much sense) and Kurt Cobain do/did, which is it doesn't have to follow a strict syllable format, just has to rhyme (mostly) and you can make it fit by articulating it weird)(also I've never let anyone look at my notebooks before so, please don't make fun of me ) so without further ado here's a song about a day passing by that I call "Out Of Time"(yes I was listening to a crap load of R.E.M at the time) I'm out of time the message/ is in this rhyme bleedin' alkaline the night will shine I'm stuck inside sun tries to hide why are you shy? Moon won't get by. I'm still unhappy moon so close to me Froze(n)(in)* the ice the heavens entice turn out the light we'll face the night glowing neon night is gone day is fun save the sun evenings musk will wait 'till dusk Restless evening stars are creeping Break into night pitch black sight the witching hour midnights flower dawn will break the night foresake early morning owls foreboding Meet you in the day you don't have to stay skylit by moon you left so soon scarred by star I know who you are stuck beneath the heavens bet on lucky sevens lost in the stratosphere I won't stay in here Dusk, dusk to dawn dawn to dusk, I'm out of time. *pulled a little Cobain/Vedder there, sweet huh? there it is, if you don't get it listen to R.E.M's "Low" and "E-bow the letter" I was going for that mellow mood. Please don't make fun of me I already know that I'm a dork, whereas if you like it as I said before I have about 210 more(yes, I'm a dork with a lot of time on my hands) Bottom line though, what do you think? ........................................................ Here's another, it's not quite finished, but I'm pretty proud of it, it has pretty good lyric structure, and all that stuff, at the time I was listening to Radiohead and R.E.M (I think that Michael Stipes my idol, but I can't be sure) Not My Boss Sure, you might be so large How does that put you in charge? You govern with fake authority Demonizing the minority Go, ride you magic oil barge 'Cause no one tops your seniority I totally agree with you sarge 50 tons of metal in my garage Chorus: You say that you're the boss In control of all the chaos No,No,No,No,No,No Protest, it goes to show you're not my boss you caused the chaos The great conspiracy plan Great Mother turned and ran One and only natures killer Calm the masses with useless filler passing the buck makes him a man Religion, your supposed pillar Now we can go to Alaska to tan Quite frankly, I just ain't a fan Chorus. There it is so far, I want to add some more verses to it, but I really like it, the lyrics all fit together like a puzzle, but each line is completely standalone and has an entirely different meaning in itself. Well done scott yes kurt cobain was a great writer, great at using metaphors :guitar:
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