Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 hello, I'm french and I'm a singer in a (neo)metal band called : Anamnesia. I need help, I need someone who could verify my lyrics. This is "When darkness falls" If you know Freddy Vs Jason, you'll understand WHEN DARKNESS FALLS It's haunting me, haunt me! When darkness falls, I feed your dreams. I live through your wishes. I find my salvation trough your fears. I don't live on Elm's street. I'm not this man with his [bleep] glove. You can find yourself in me cos I am the illusion of your reality. When darkness falls, I fall on your flesh. Let me burn your eyes. I'm just a doctor who wanna tear your skin for him. I'm not a kind of vampire. I'm not this coward : Fred Krugger. You are afraid by my face cos I am the reflection of your personality. And I'm haunting you, hate me! :guitar: :guitar: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 Tell me if my english is correct. Please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scott Posted March 13, 2005 Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 Well your english is pretty good, except it would probably work better if you changed the line 'afraid by my face' to 'afraid of my face' oh, and generally speaking it's Freddy Kreuger, not Fred. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
marko90 Posted March 13, 2005 Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 I live through your wishes. I find my salvation trough your fears. I thought it was good but that one line... I think it should be "I live through your wishes. I find salvation through your fears." just take out the MY in there and it would sound better... but thats just one mans opinion... peace out MARKO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 Thank you. Very cool. I said Fred cos he's an old friend and an old friend of the character who speak(s) hummm I'm not sure : "s" or not? :guitar: :guitar: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 Thanks for "salvation" too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
edna Posted March 13, 2005 Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 an old friend of the character who speak(s) hummm I'm not sure : "s" or not? If it is "he" then it takes an "s", if it´s "they", no "s". In this case, "speaks" coz I understand it´s the friend... or the character... if they were both, then it´s pluriel (that is french) so no "s". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 ok So I must say : for exemple "the one who knows the things you hide". But, for some verbs, it's different : "can" or other verbs who take no "s" with "he", "she" or "it". Exact? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
edna Posted March 13, 2005 Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 Voilà! "Can", "May" and sans doute others... But as I forgot all the grammar rules I learned au lycée we´d better wait till some english-speaking songfactor tells you more about this... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 This song is called "One" ONE Cos I am the one who knows the things you hide, the one who can protect you. The one who knows your pride is blind. The one who takes a look in your flavoured soul. You can run, you can hide, you can hope, you can crash too. You can cry, you can try, you can pray, you won't recover from me. You're away from me. You're away from all these rainy days. Stay with me, I'll hold you up. I wanna feel her breathe on me. But I know she will die. Cos I am the one who need to believe in love, the one who calls your embrace. The one who changes the way you feel, the one who takes the angels away. You're the one. The only one. For me. The one who touches my heart, the one who makes me feel alive. The one who's pretty, the one who's great, the one who's strong, the one... where are you, God? :guitar: :guitar: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scott Posted March 13, 2005 Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 change 'need' in 'cos I'm the one who need to believe' to 'needs' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2005 Thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 14, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 14, 2005 This is "Burning dust". There is only 9 sentences. The rest of the lyrics is for exemple "a burning skin.", "Hollow desires."... 2 or 3 words. BURNING DUST Nothing more than stinking games. An animal in a cage. The score of my feelings. I am sunk into this life. I live where memories disappear. Embracing this dust, I rest in peace. And my beliefs, at the mercy of the winds. I know I'm going crazy. I'm loosing my will. It makes me die inside. Thank you. :guitar: :guitar: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anamnesia Posted March 18, 2005 Author Report Share Posted March 18, 2005 Please... Help me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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