jute86 Posted March 5, 2005 Report Share Posted March 5, 2005 Hi again -- here's another one I just wrote -- I'd appreciate any and all feedback Thanks in advance! Delivering Flowers Hold my hand I won?t let go If you?re feeling tired Just let me know I?ll tuck you in And close the shades Leave the music on Until it fades And if tomorrow comes And you still feel the same I?ll take you away Away from the shame [chorus] We?ll drive away Down Interstate 61 Heading for nowhere This isn?t for fun We need to get away This car is way too slow If tomorrow?s like today We?ll get there soon, I know This will all get better In time, the wounds will heal But for now just hold my hand That is all you need to feel And when he yelled You?d cry for hours I?d climb through your window Delivering flowers And when it got bad He spun out of control Came after your heart Like it was something you stole You fought back hard Swung reckless and fast But your fear was not enough And you came in dead last [chorus] So now we?ll drive away Down Interstate 61 Heading for nowhere This isn?t for fun We need to get away This car is way too slow If tomorrow?s like today We?ll get there soon, I know This will all get better In time, the wounds will heal But for now just hold my hand That is all you need to feel I?ll stay with you for hours Delivering the flowers To keep you smiling every day Now that the past has gone away Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
windy1 Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 jute I don't have the words to properly say what I think. I just know when things touch me and this does. Very nice. Well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrampledUnderFoot Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 I really enjoyed it and I'd like to hear it as a song so I could really get the feel of it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pete38890 Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 That is sweet and sad. And perfect. I sent it to the goddess and she cried those nourishing tears that tell me when something is truly superb. I wish I had your eyes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aunt_Acid Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 The goddess? Either you're a newlywed or a whipped old man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
windy1 Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 Or Karhul! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pete38890 Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 no to one, yes to two. problem? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
windy1 Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 No problem Pete, just a running joke! Hey you are a relative newbie. Welcome!!! :: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
edna Posted March 6, 2005 Report Share Posted March 6, 2005 Welcome, Pete! You´ll love this place... Jute, I love your poem. I would say the same than Windy in her first post... very touching. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jenny Posted March 7, 2005 Report Share Posted March 7, 2005 I liked it too!!! Sweet and touching Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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