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Black Heart and Some Ramblings

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Stuff from Lack that wasn?t used.

You said you cared, said you knew.

This is unfair, how we are through.

Did you take it, hard or the same?

Pack the ice to negate this pain.

Numbing it feels, these scars will heal.

But you can?t feel that this pain is real.

Black Heart Version 1

Social injustice separates the truth.

Blind by our own minds.

What have we come to?

We believe it?s our right, to shatter our earths.

It?s just yourself on your own shelf.

A new chapter in the book of your world.

C

You just have to change.

Who can you blame.

So please shed, shed, some light on a new day.

V2

Your world can?t be crumbling, please sit still.

The ground is shaking and breaking.

Don?t let it destroy your will.

The night has fallen, it?s a darkening sky.

You won?t smile for a while.

But please don?t cry.

C

You just have to change.

Who can you blame.

So shed, so shed, some light on a new day.

V3

This day will bring balance, a strange bell will ring.

Bringing solution, a positive thing.

Don?t let this consume, your every thought.

Look deep inside you, I know your not lost?.

C

You just have to change.

Who can you blame.

So shed, so shed, some light on this? brand.. new.. day.

Written about a friend who is in need.

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It's pretty good, but what's the stuff in the beginning? It's a good way of asking why while trying to convince the other that things are as bad as they think.

This line

"You won?t smile for a while."

Sounds a little goofy. Using smile and while in the same line just doesn't sound right. Maybe "for quite some time" or something along those lines instead. Otherwise it's good!

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Well my friend actually read what I had on paper, and told me to type it up, and I put it in my post.

About the song, and the smile for a while, I really like that line, and if sang correctly, it will work.

Thanks for the feedback.

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