Dreaming

[marko90]

Well, this is my newest peice, I would appreciate it if I could get some comments on it...thank you muchly...

DREAMING

[Verse 1]

Since you left, I cannot move on

I lay here, I cry from dusk till dawn

I try everyday, Try to understand this

You come around, wanting to talk

Why cant you see, there is nothing to talk about

{Chorus}

Dreaming is what gets me by, dreaming you never left

Tonight doesn?t feel right, I need to hold you tight

Without you I fear, I fear what I?ll become

Sitting alone, I wonder if you miss me

Alone I wonder, if we?ll ever be together again

[Verse 2]

Monday has come, I still morn this

Nothing seems to change, you haven?t come back

I close my eyes, wishing you?ll appear

You never seem to be here, tonight I break into tears

You?ve placed me away from you, SO I guess I?ll never see

{Chorus}

Dreaming is what gets me by, dreaming you never left

Tonight doesn?t feel right, I need to hold you tight

Without you I fear, I fear what I?ll become

Sitting alone, I wonder if you miss me

Alone I wonder, if we?ll ever be together again

[Verse 3]

Maybe someday, you can see me walk again

Right now nothing is fine, I really do need you

I lost that chance, I don?t know how

I lost my chance, I don?t know why

I lost this chance, now I?m crying

Now I?m dying, and now I?m crying

Now I?m dying, and now I?m crying

Now I?m dying, and now I?m crying

[Addictedtoclassic]

I like it, but it's a little saddening. Kind of depressing, but the wording is done well. Although you may want to revise this line:

"Monday has come, I still morn this"

For some reason it just doesn't sound quite right. It seems that your music lately has a very sad theme in mind.

[marko90]

I will look into changing that.

Also it is sad because I have been really down since my Girlfreind left me.

[Addictedtoclassic]

Aah yes, in fact I believe you've mentioned that before. Personal emotion can really bring out the writer in many people. Let your mind flow and your pen go and maybe it will help you get through it easier.

[marko90]

Alright, I have fixed it up a bit, changed the first line in the second verse.

DREAMING

[Verse 1]

Since you left, I cannot move on

I lay here, I cry from dusk till dawn

I try everyday, Try to understand this

You come around, wanting to talk

Why cant you see, there is nothing to talk about

{Chorus}

Dreaming is what gets me by, dreaming you never left

Tonight doesn?t feel right, I need to hold you tight

Without you I fear, I fear what I?ll become

Sitting alone, I wonder if you miss me

Alone I wonder, if we?ll ever be together again

[Verse 2]

I cry away today, I guess I?ll cry in tomorrow too

Nothing seems to change, you haven?t come back

I close my eyes, wishing you?ll appear

You never seem to be here, tonight I break into tears

You?ve placed me away from you, so I guess I?ll never see

{Chorus}

Dreaming is what gets me by, dreaming you never left

Tonight doesn?t feel right, I need to hold you tight

Without you I fear, I fear what I?ll become

Sitting alone, I wonder if you miss me

Alone I wonder, if we?ll ever be together again

[Verse 3]

Maybe someday, you can see me walk again

Right now nothing is fine, I really do need you

I lost that chance, I don?t know how

I lost my chance, I don?t know why

I lost this chance, now I?m crying

Now I?m dying, and now I?m crying

Now I?m dying, and now I?m crying

Now I?m dying, and now I?m crying