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Yellow Tape


jute86

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Hey everyone :) I don't really post here too much, usually just read through. But I've taken up a bit of songwriting lately and I'm looking for opinions from some 'unbiased' reviewers (not my best friends) :) I'd appreciate anything you have to say.

And no, not all of the songs I've written are this....depressing lol ;) Thanks in advance!!

Yellow Tape

There?s nothing left here

Everything is lost

The day killed me slowly

And the night is here to finish me off

There is no time to think

My words are so far gone

There?s nothing left to say

And nowhere I belong

There?s no way I?m gonna see the light

So please don?t come by tonight

Because the minutes take hours

And the hours take days

And every time I try to think

My thoughts all fade away

And you shouldn?t come by

Cause you can?t make it right

Tomorrow will never get here

If I leave all this tonight

The clock reads two

But I still stay awake

The thoughts of sleep

They all seem so fake

The silence is killing me

By morning I?m gone

The darkness conceals me

Hidden by dawn

And all the yellow tape will surround me

You?ll tell them this is the way that you found me

Because the minutes take hours

And the hours take days

And every time I try to think

My thoughts all fade away

And you shouldn?t come by

Cause you can?t make it right

Tomorrow will never get here

If I leave all this tonight

Cause I left here tonight

So tomorrow wouldn?t come

Now the darkness is blinding

And my insides feel numb

And the yellow tape, it surrounds me

You told them this is how you found me

...Laura

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It feels like you're reading my exact thoughts on any given night... Quite scary, actually, how similiar our feelings seem to be.

It's really nice that you say everything without being blunt. Cuz the word suicide is so harsh. Your poem encompasses all the emotions without making it too obvious.

I really like it. You should do more! :thumbsup:

But I must say I hope you're not feeling like that all the time. You can always PM me if you want to talk. Take care! :)

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