Ender Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 He breaks throught the door And he looks for his wife He beat on the kid 'til he took his own life The woman looks in the mirror In her eyes shes sees her fear Just another case of Domestic violence Its time someone broke the silence All her friends try to help She only ignores them Says shes doing quite well But beneath the smile Shes sick of this hell Sick of the beatings And hearing his yell Just another case of Domestic violence Its time someone broke the silence The next day she opens the droor And finds what shes looking for And to his surprise When he opens up the door Last thing that he hears Is the colt .44 Now she cleans up the body On her kitchen floor Just another case of Domestic violence Its time someone broke the silence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karhul Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 What was the motive for this poem?. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 Oh. My. God. You really do have a talent for writing, i loved it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Foxy Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 That stopped me in my tracks too. Excellent piece. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
edna Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 What was the motive for this poem?. Have you ever heard of "domestic violence", Karhul? You might not know it from your personal experience (thanks god, neither do I...) but it´s there... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
babyduck85 Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 It's really well-written but I really hope this isn't a personal experience... It's terrible that this happens so much and no one does anything... I don't know what I would do if it were me... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
windy1 Posted February 6, 2005 Report Share Posted February 6, 2005 The second stanza(is that the right word?)is incredible. You can't know unless you've been there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ender Posted February 9, 2005 Author Report Share Posted February 9, 2005 Thank you guys for all the compliments, i appreciate them Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Addictedtoclassic Posted February 9, 2005 Report Share Posted February 9, 2005 Minneapolis... This is a very disturbing piece, but the words are so powerful and descriptive that it really gives you a picture in your mind how things can really happen in life. I really like the ending. The song as a whole builds up to this tragedy that is occuring and then... peace comes in the midst of madness. Very well written and the lyrics are flow very smoothly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jim36921 Posted February 17, 2005 Report Share Posted February 17, 2005 Wow. i can relate totally, this one is a keeper. i can just pray that its not a personal experience, keep writing ender Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrampledUnderFoot Posted February 17, 2005 Report Share Posted February 17, 2005 whoa, that sounds like it could make a very good song Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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