Sillyguy4u04 Posted January 20, 2005 Report Share Posted January 20, 2005 Hey, I know this probably really sucks, but I wrote it. I am having trouble coming up with a beat for it. Can someone please help? It was late one night You called me on the phone You said it was a fight The story is just too long I told you I had nothing better to do You explain the situtation it was him I spent the whole night listenin to you You said its ok he wont do it again I dont know why you let him hurt you so much What you really need is a gentle loving touch But it's always "give it another day", hes got something to say, You've got tears in your eyes, let me fix things baby dont cry, Ill always be here I promise its a fact, just please stop lettin him treat you like that It happened again its worse this time, He hits you and tells u ur worthless This guy is lower than slime Ill hold u with you head on my chest Theres nothing I can really do Until you decide you cant take anymore So Ill just comfort you Until you make the choice to walk out the door I cant understand how you put up with it Its way past time for you to spilt But it's always "give it another day", hes got something to say, You've got tears in your eyes, let me fix things baby dont cry, Ill always be here I promise its a fact, just please stop lettin him treat you like that This time he went to far It wasnt just a smack Now he's left a scar I wont take this sitting back You beg me to stay calm You'll do it on ur own We go talk to your mom She tells you to come home Finally youve broke the chains your finally free You look into my eyes and say you want me It's finally the last day, you dont want to hear what he has to say, I wiped those tears from your eyes, you have no more reasons to cry, Ill always be here I promise thats a fact, you finally stopped lettin him treat you like that Ill never treat you like that Ill never treat you like that I guess what Im lookin 4 is sum1 who can provide an original beat or sum1 who has a suggestion of a jacked beat to put it too, jus the beat from any song Please help! Any genre is cool too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrampledUnderFoot Posted March 1, 2005 Report Share Posted March 1, 2005 I am no song writer or anything, but it seems more like a slow song to me...maybe tighten up a few screws in there, get a good guitar going...or you could go from soft to more hardcore at the end...that'd be cool if you played around with it a bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_jr_ Posted March 1, 2005 Report Share Posted March 1, 2005 Newark, Delaware? How did I miss this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jimmy1104 Posted March 1, 2005 Report Share Posted March 1, 2005 JR....I could have said the same thing. The company I have worked for the last 26 years also has offices in Newark, Delaware. I was down there once for a bowling tournament about 25 years ago. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RonJonSurfer Posted March 1, 2005 Report Share Posted March 1, 2005 To many words for a slow tempo/beat. The song will be ten minutes long. I'm hearing a relatively rapid and staccato beat. When you get to the two line chorus, it should turn to screaming anger. Electric guitar ripping power chords. Then back to the original pace. Just my two cents. :guitar: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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