Ender Posted January 4, 2005 Report Share Posted January 4, 2005 It seems so long ago Now this love has taken its toll My heart you have broken and stole I see my future begin to unroll I think by myslef as i take a stroll Now im caught in this hellhole Im in this black hole that is my soul I dont care about the years gone to waste I care about all the tears i had to taste I care about the fears that i have faced Im left feeling alone and out of space Now all these memories i have to erase Love cant be replaced, only held and embrased It seems so long ago Now this love has taken its toll My heart you have broken and stole I see my future begin to unroll I think by myslef as i take a stroll Now im caught in this hellhole Im in this black hole that is my soul I howl at the moon for my hearts pain Let the wolf know hes not alone in this game Outsides nice and sunny but i cant avoid the rain Cant deal with all of the thoughts in my brain The only end i see is the end of my life I know you dont love so will you hand me the knife? It seems so long ago Now this love has taken its toll My heart you have broken and stole I see my future begin to unroll I think by myslef as i take a stroll Now im caught in this hellhole Im in this black hole that is my soul Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Foxy Posted January 10, 2005 Report Share Posted January 10, 2005 Lots of rhyming there - very good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
johnnymahoe Posted January 13, 2005 Report Share Posted January 13, 2005 It's a good poem and the rhyming is nice, but i would seperate out the rhyming words a little bit more, instead of 1 rhyming word at the end of each line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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