Ender Posted January 4, 2005 Report Posted January 4, 2005 It seems so long ago Now this love has taken its toll My heart you have broken and stole I see my future begin to unroll I think by myslef as i take a stroll Now im caught in this hellhole Im in this black hole that is my soul I dont care about the years gone to waste I care about all the tears i had to taste I care about the fears that i have faced Im left feeling alone and out of space Now all these memories i have to erase Love cant be replaced, only held and embrased It seems so long ago Now this love has taken its toll My heart you have broken and stole I see my future begin to unroll I think by myslef as i take a stroll Now im caught in this hellhole Im in this black hole that is my soul I howl at the moon for my hearts pain Let the wolf know hes not alone in this game Outsides nice and sunny but i cant avoid the rain Cant deal with all of the thoughts in my brain The only end i see is the end of my life I know you dont love so will you hand me the knife? It seems so long ago Now this love has taken its toll My heart you have broken and stole I see my future begin to unroll I think by myslef as i take a stroll Now im caught in this hellhole Im in this black hole that is my soul
johnnymahoe Posted January 13, 2005 Report Posted January 13, 2005 It's a good poem and the rhyming is nice, but i would seperate out the rhyming words a little bit more, instead of 1 rhyming word at the end of each line.
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