marko90 Posted December 1, 2004 Report Share Posted December 1, 2004 OK, this is my newest one, I'd like some feedback please because it helps me become a better writer, spank you, Marko. here it is, Enjoy!!! Broken and used [Verse 1] It?s all over now, I can?t continue this way You never wanted to stay You were in this to bring me down If it was for the best?why do I wear this frown? You tore me down, kicked and hurt me I guess its true? love is blind. Everything was perfect in my mind {Chorus} I guess I should thank you You showed me to stand on my own feet I stand here today separate from your deceit I know within me there was no defeat You left me standing, battered and bruised Broken and used, I refuse to love you! [Verse 2] Now here on the trail of memories This is a constant reminder of better times The days where I was in an eternal high But I guess that trail has died All because of your lies {Chorus} I guess I should thank you You showed me to stand on my own feet I stand here today separate from your deceit I know within me there was no defeat You left me standing, battered and bruised Broken and used, I refuse to love you! [Verse 3] There was a time when love was in me Now all that?s left is shattered hate And yet I can?t live without you Still, to this day? I don?t know why I?m so far away I guess deep down? I still love you (repeat 2X) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cockrocker788 Posted December 1, 2004 Report Share Posted December 1, 2004 a little cliche, but better than i could've produced, if that matters any. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RBB Posted December 2, 2004 Report Share Posted December 2, 2004 Good job Mark, I love the chorus..... I guess I should thank you You showed me to stand on my own feet I stand here today separate from your deceit I know within me there was no defeat You left me standing, battered and bruised Broken and used, I refuse to love you! Good Job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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