Hroo Posted November 11, 2004 Report Share Posted November 11, 2004 The candles are lit, the wine is chilled the vase in the middle of the table is filled such a cozy scene, the only thing I miss is you here with me on a night like this. Refrain: On a night like this I'm thinking of romance candlelight flickering over an after-dinner dance as the music fades and I'm longing for a kiss I sure could use you here on a night like this. The candles are dying, the wine has gone to my head and my thoughts about you are turning me on such a cozy scene, how could loneliness be my only companion on a night like this? Refrain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted November 11, 2004 Report Share Posted November 11, 2004 The candles are lit, the wine is chilled the vase in the middle of the table is filled such a cozy scene, the only thing I miss is you here with me on a night like this. to my head and my thoughts about you are turning me on Great thought for a song or lyrical poem. That first stanza is a great one! It has rythmn and flows so well. That solo line I put in quotes above does not have the same rythmn or flow. Feels a little awkward. If you could get that in the same meter as the rest of this fine piece, you will have a winner! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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