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On a night like this


Hroo

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The candles are lit, the wine is chilled

the vase in the middle of the table is filled

such a cozy scene, the only thing I miss

is you here with me on a night like this.

Refrain:

On a night like this I'm thinking of romance

candlelight flickering over an after-dinner dance

as the music fades and I'm longing for a kiss

I sure could use you here on a night like this.

The candles are dying, the wine has gone

to my head and my thoughts about you are turning me on

such a cozy scene, how could loneliness

be my only companion on a night like this?

Refrain

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The candles are lit, the wine is chilled

the vase in the middle of the table is filled

such a cozy scene, the only thing I miss

is you here with me on a night like this.

to my head and my thoughts about you are turning me on

Great thought for a song or lyrical poem. That first stanza is a great one! It has rythmn and flows so well. That solo line I put in quotes above does not have the same rythmn or flow. Feels a little awkward. If you could get that in the same meter as the rest of this fine piece, you will have a winner!

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