Mairi Posted October 30, 2004 Report Share Posted October 30, 2004 Hey, this is a song i wrote last month, fairly recent compared to my other stuff. Intoxicated You never glance at me Your eyes never meet mine You're always far away You're never truely fine is it because i arrived that you walked away? Do you enjoy seeing me slowly fade away? Chorus Inhale, exhale, slowly breathe the fumes in breathe in, breathe out, look aound and roll your eyes Why do you feel intoxicated and move away? claustrophobic, neurotic, paranoid Is it because i choose to stay that you suffocate, asphixiate Lose control become intoxicated When you talk to me i always feel ashamed you seem so distant so wanting to be blamed When i look at you you seem so unvindicated is this an act unindicated? Chorus Im sorry if i make you feel oppressed i guess im only loud to hide being depressed Maybe we are alike but it doesnt matter nothing matters because you ignore me ok, my writing has gone downhill and i know it, but meh, i wrote this coz i was depressed :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danielj Posted October 30, 2004 Report Share Posted October 30, 2004 I do like this one but not as much as your last one. Keep writing though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jenny Posted November 1, 2004 Report Share Posted November 1, 2004 I agree with Dan. The first two verses and the chorus are really good, but the third verse doesn't seem to fit in. Still, I am more than twice your age and can't write anything that good, so don't put yourself down. Keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Please sign in to comment
You will be able to leave a comment after signing in
Sign In Now