Mairi Posted October 25, 2004 Report Share Posted October 25, 2004 Yeh, im fairly new(ok, i just joined yesterday but whatever) and im only 14 so consider my age while you read this and please, no rotten fruit throwing! (its a poem) Broken Bottled up Anger, fear, hatred, jealousy, lonliness Ouside seemingly Happy, odd, carefree not me at all I lie here, drowning in self-loathe asphixiated by higher power gasping in my namesake. Was it fate or something i decided? A sea of bitterness, artificial? Natural? Perhaps outer sources Aliens to my thoughts, destruct but create power turns to greed and greed to Mutilation fraying of edges,cluttered emotions screaming, screaming barely a whisper, notifyed and registered as Nothingness So i stay here drowning my sorrows in words and punctuation lines upon lines of meaningless wanderings of a broken mind. (it may sound very morbid and scary but it was a dark time for me) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
marko90 Posted October 25, 2004 Report Share Posted October 25, 2004 Well for starters WELCOME TO SONG FACTS!!! good to have another Writter!!! Now, you Poem was very deep and very metephorical, and for that I am Envious, I wish I could be metephorical in my lyrics too, but I am not, your writing is VERY well done, Metephorical, and yet easy to understand, GOOD JOB!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 thank you very much ::, i was a bit wary in case people would laugh or something. just in case yo were wondering, it was about my low self-esteem but i think that's pretty clear lol. there's a part in it that says "ea of bitterness". i added this in because my name is gaelic for mary which means sea of bitterness, just some facts for ya, hope it didnt spoil the poem! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted October 26, 2004 Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 Well done Marz! I really liked it, really well written, you should be extremely proud! I particulary likes these lines.. So i stay here drowning my sorrows in words and punctuation lines upon lines of meaningless wanderings of a broken mind. ..Really good stuff, fair play Have a bannana :happybanana: :happybanana: :happybanana: :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 you're making me blush! everyone here is so nice! and i WILL have a banana and i offer one in return :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted October 26, 2004 Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 :: That..I will take :happybanana: just look at him go.. :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 he never seems to get tired, does he? now that's dedication for ya! :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted October 26, 2004 Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 Never, ever..We could all learn a thing or two, from the bannana :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 yes, an inspiration to us all, be like the banana. no BE the banana! :happybanana: :happybanana: :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted October 26, 2004 Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 Yes, indeed, lets not forget the pumpkin, he rocks too, just not hard, like bannanaby here :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 bannanaby aww sweet name :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted October 26, 2004 Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 Lol, I know right! Ickle bannaby--> :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 it's like a baby :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 26, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 i will add more of my songs/poem type things when i can be bothered getting my diary :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted October 26, 2004 Report Share Posted October 26, 2004 Look forward to it.. :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_jr_ Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 Mairi, first of all, don't ever apologize before you post your work. It's your own creation, be proud of it. If someone finds it not to their liking, that's their problem, not yours. Secondly, I enjoyed it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Earth-Angel Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 Mairi, that was awesome! :: I think you should find that diary of yours and start posting more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 thank you, you are all so nice! im just about to post some more stuff :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SoulGirl Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 that's their problem, not yours. jr you rock! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 i concur :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SoulGirl Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 and well done mairi btw, for someone of your age that's very good work (i don't mean that patronisingly i hope you understand. i wrote lots of similar stuff when i was the same age... oh so long ago! ) also, i don't know how you don't like your name?! i thnk it's gorgeous, my gran's name is maire, the irish version. how do you pronounce yours? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 thankyou very much and its pronounced marry like as in to marry someone (hence lots of teasing and "jokes" also hence why i hate it so much) :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SoulGirl Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 hey, try having a german name like gisela in ireland!! no one ever gets it right. one of my lecturers has been pronouncing it wrong for three years! and that's enough without all the nazi jokes i got growing up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mairi Posted October 27, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 urgh, people who crack the same jokes over and over again are just ignoramuses(i dont know how to spell therefore i am an ignoramus) like the ever so funny "mairi who you gonna marry?" or "mairi will you marry me" its put me off marriage all together (almost). there was one time when i laughed at one but it was becasue it was so crap "Mairi Christmas" :happybanana: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_jr_ Posted October 27, 2004 Report Share Posted October 27, 2004 jr you rock! Keen. I rock. According to CD, I live under one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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