PSYCHOcatholic Posted August 10, 2004 Report Share Posted August 10, 2004 ...better than death. I was on the verge of Suicide. I had nothing. I had a loving family, friends, a girlfriend. I had nothing. I was loved by God, and Jesus Christ. I had nothing. I pretended to Love back. I had nothing. I had nothing inside of my soul. I felt feelings, but was not affected. I had nothing. I had nothing...nothing but a hole...in my soul. I just wrote this..not my best work. But its the truth. It doesnt rhyme, and it may not make sense to you, but, poetry is the key to opening your own heart. tell me what you think. i wanna start writing again i think. I am only 18, and i think i wanna start a book. i had a question for Carl or Sara or anybody who might know this. I have something that can be posted in here. But, it has cussing in it. it was gettin out all my emotions. It is my letter to the world. Do you think they would let me post it?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sara Posted August 10, 2004 Report Share Posted August 10, 2004 Swears are acceptable when they are part of a piece of work. We use the same rule for swears in songs. However, please be sure to bleep yourself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alecto Posted August 15, 2004 Report Share Posted August 15, 2004 I actually specifically looked for your work here and wow. So much of what you said is true. I especially connected with ... I was loved by God, and Jesus Christ. I had nothing. I pretended to Love back. It could almost be a chorus or something. you definitly hit the suicidal nail on the head. Great piece. ~Alecto Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danielj Posted August 15, 2004 Report Share Posted August 15, 2004 Dude, that reminds me of The Who's-The Seeker YOU WANNA KNOW THE MEANING OF LIFE? Love, Fun, Be ready for heaven I guess.... To see if you are worthy of Heaven. Like, do you want the fiery pits of hell? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Earth-Angel Posted September 6, 2004 Report Share Posted September 6, 2004 It's great! It makes me start thinking about my own life and what I have and how I feel :: I fear I have really been slipping away from God. Guess that's why I connect with it. Good going and keep writing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted September 6, 2004 Report Share Posted September 6, 2004 I was loved by God, and Jesus Christ. I had nothing. I pretended to Love back. One of the best quotes of futility I've ever read. One can't pretend anything to God, as I'm sure you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_jr_ Posted September 6, 2004 Report Share Posted September 6, 2004 It's richly descriptive because of what it doesn't say, if that makes any sense. It gives the reader the chance to fill the spaces with their own emotions. At least, that's what I did. I was there once, when I was young. But, as I grew older, I realized those empty spaces weren't really empty. I just wasn't looking in the right place for the fufillment. Sorry, I didn't mean to stray. You have a gift. Keep using it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danielj Posted September 6, 2004 Report Share Posted September 6, 2004 I just read that again. Man that was good. You do have a gift. Post some more stuff Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted September 7, 2004 Report Share Posted September 7, 2004 I have to agree. The more I read it, the more it means. Not only that, it can mean different things at different times. It's very good. If this isn't your best piece, psycho, I shudder to think of your best. Creative Writing awaits more from you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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