Jillianne Posted August 9, 2004 Report Share Posted August 9, 2004 I wrote this when I was 12 after something in my family happened, its not really good, but I wonder if people will understand what it is about The Secret A empty place A poisoned mind My soul now unsteady Continue enduring Don't utter a word Focus on nothing And it won't be heard Drink the salt Taste the pain Just this once never again My breath's insufficient My lungs now taut But there will be a light After this fault My eyes are closing Yes, I can see the scent The pain is gone The secrets kept Blackness is falling Darkness is you Im on the edge My soul now hollow My lips now blue I don't know if people will actually get what its about, but yeah just thought I would post it, go easy on me, we all can't be as good as Scott or Bobo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sutho Posted August 10, 2004 Report Share Posted August 10, 2004 give us more clues sounds sad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted August 10, 2004 Author Report Share Posted August 10, 2004 Well its about mentally blocking out something thats happening, and whatever happened is supposed to be kept secret.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarcM Posted August 10, 2004 Report Share Posted August 10, 2004 I hope I am wrong, but it sounds like it is about molestation. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted August 10, 2004 Author Report Share Posted August 10, 2004 Yeah its about rape EDIT: Not about me by the way, a certain member of my family, who became pregnant and moved to New York to get away from it, its written from her prospective Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PSYCHOcatholic Posted August 11, 2004 Report Share Posted August 11, 2004 Very good poem, i sadly know alot of people who are pregnant from rape, or have been raped. Its a sad day when the Valedictorian of your high school has to drop out 2 weeks before graduation. It sucks when she is one of your good friends. Honestly speaking, if i had to choose to send someone to the electric chair, and i had Hitler, and a Rapist in front of me, i would choose the rapist. Worst Crime EVER! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarcM Posted August 11, 2004 Report Share Posted August 11, 2004 Honestly speaking, if i had to choose to send someone to the electric chair, and i had Hitler, and a Rapist in front of me, i would choose the rapist. Worst Crime EVER! I think Hitler may have been a little worse than a rapist, with the millions killed and all, but I understand your anger. How about we put the rapist on Hitler's lap... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jillianne Posted August 11, 2004 Author Report Share Posted August 11, 2004 Thanks, yeah, it's awful, he never got caught, but my Da and my granda, took things 'into their own hands' so to speak, but she's never been the same since, but they will have to answer to someone..someday... Very good poem, i sadly know alot of people who are pregnant from rape, or have been raped. Its a sad day when the Valedictorian of your high school has to drop out 2 weeks before graduation. It sucks when she is one of your good friends. Honestly speaking, if i had to choose to send someone to the electric chair, and i had Hitler, and a Rapist in front of me, i would choose the rapist. Worst Crime EVER! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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