J Hill Posted February 7, 2009 Report Share Posted February 7, 2009 Poem X Stone Stand up for these times Stand up and be kind Stand no matter what all the peoples say saying care for yourself You can be kind. Keep a little wish Keep it close and dream like it's a child in the nite and even if not right it will still be your wish so you can cry right now Like a child in the night. (because that is alright) *jdh* 2009 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Posted February 7, 2009 Report Share Posted February 7, 2009 "say saying ?' , 'nite ' , and what about this crying - too deep for me . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J Hill Posted February 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 8, 2009 Thanx for readin' Kev, but sorry (really) I had no idea the denizens of this creative outpost would be so adamant and strict in adherence to spelling, punctuation (meter) and linear metaphor. All i can say is it made sense to me at the time as a work in progress, off the top of my head set of words. It's exhibition for public viewing may have been pre-mature, but everything moves so fast these days... (EZ for me to say, I know) Heard something about owning one's own feelings. And finding the bravery to hold up and cherish even the bad ones. And trying to choose mostly generosity over self-indulgance...I should try to be more clear.. again, Thanks For Reading! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Posted February 9, 2009 Report Share Posted February 9, 2009 Sorry ,I should have explained a little more . I was just wondering why you chose those words ( and their spelling as you did ) and I didn't get the bit about why you were crying . Because wishes rarely come true , perhaps ? I tend not to venture forth opinions/comments in this forum much , as I seem to annoy the poets or make them defensive . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MuzikTyme Posted February 9, 2009 Report Share Posted February 9, 2009 Good practice, Kevin, dear lad...Arr! J Hill, your words are fine as far as I'm concerned. Keep up the fine writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J Hill Posted February 10, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 10, 2009 Sorry ,I should have explained a little more . I was just wondering why you chose those words ( and their spelling as you did ) and I didn't get the bit about why you were crying . Because wishes rarely come true , perhaps ? I tend not to venture forth opinions/comments in this forum much , as I seem to annoy the poets or make them defensive . No Kevin, I'm the one who should be apologizing. My snarkiness can sometimes be uncontrollable ( a very, very, bad habit picked up when just very young) I very much appreciate your comments and your reading here. Like I said, this was something i wrote pretty much, off the top of my head (should be an acronym for that, heh.) I heard something like it when waking one recent morning, a little later, before going to work, I found a pen and some bit of scrap paper and wrote down the lines. Later that night I put them here. Sometimes when writing I am in such a hurry to get it down, I use a bit of short-hand and a lack of spelling/punctuation. I guess i left a couple things like that here. One, in the case of 'nite/night', because i liked how it sort of differentiated between the two different children in the night. One with hope, one dispair. The 'say/saying' I know there should've been a period or coma or quote marks or maybe even a semi-colon between, but i left it because i just liked the way it flowed like the original words in my head had. And, finally, i am not really writing about "me" crying (tho I certainly haved) it was something about having dreams even when you know some of those wishs will not be delivered, and learning to accept, if not embrace, that. Thank you again! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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