My New Poem

[J Hill]

Stone Written Poem

An ugly man with confidence is quite the sight to see

I’m finally seeing who makes the rules

And that man is really me.

When you see the people passing by, hunger in their eyes

Be sure to hold your groceries close

But don't just pass them by.

And when we finally all decide to call our hurts our own

The god’s may fight and fly into a rage

For the truth will then be known.

At long last now I figured it out, I’ve finally found the tonic

If today by accident I’m hit by a truck

Now, that would be ironic.

*jdh*

[Steel2Velvet]

Replace "truck" with "steamroller"

[blind-fitter]

...so that it will no longer scan correctly?

[J Hill]

....i wish i knew the reason. Why?....

"If by steamroller accident from a truck I am struck..." ...hmmmmm...

or....

"If by steamroller accident today I am struck"

.....i still wish i knew the new reason. Why?

??????????????????

Edited February 7, 2009 by Guest
"well deserved obscurity"

[MuzikTyme]

The only reason is, "just because"

Good prose, J Hill . . .

[Steel2Velvet]

....i wish i knew the reason. Why?....

"If by steamroller accident from a truck I am struck..." ...hmmmmm...

or....

"If by steamroller accident today I am struck"

.....i still wish i knew the new reason. Why?

??????????????????

Because, if your character were run over by a steamroller:

"Now, that would be ironic." (iron-ic)