TheLizard Posted January 18, 2008 Report Share Posted January 18, 2008 Helter skelter brain in an eggshell Crack Crack Caught somewhere in a darkness between heaven and hell Crack Crack This way, that way, a wedding with a funeral bell Six really did turn out to be nine Surely things will turn out fine Stay clean and stay quiet Keep walking on that line Ignore that inner riot Your mind is lying Heavy metal soft porn imagination Shut it up before it gets out Death life east west all together Confident in a sense of doubt An apple a day failed this time Overdose of thoughts bring on the end Sink into the well of schemes A brilliant stupidity has to mend Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Ry 71 Posted January 18, 2008 Report Share Posted January 18, 2008 I heard this as a litle prog-rock piece; the lyrics sounds like they have a very big influence from there. Kind of sounds like something King Crimson would write, only I'm sure YOUR lyrics really mean something. In other words, good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Viaene Posted January 18, 2008 Report Share Posted January 18, 2008 You write very mysterious, like a true poet. I have some guesses on what the meaning could be, but they are all very vague good job, I like it espescially: "Six really did turn out to be nine" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miamisammy29 Posted January 18, 2008 Report Share Posted January 18, 2008 Very Stipe-ish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shawna Posted January 19, 2008 Report Share Posted January 19, 2008 I like the dichotomy. You shed unique light on what it's like to be under the proverbial thumb. Nice work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steel2Velvet Posted January 19, 2008 Report Share Posted January 19, 2008 This is so much more than good, Tim. It has an expanding depth to it that provokes thought, introspection and at the same time, through circling insights, offers some answers to questions not often asked. Favorite line: "Confident in a sense of doubt" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Laurie_ Posted January 19, 2008 Report Share Posted January 19, 2008 Excellent Tim...I don't write poetry, but I love reading it....You described the title perfectly with a very creative style of writing..... my favorite line: Ignore that inner riot Your mind is lying Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLizard Posted January 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 Thanks everybody, I always appreciate the feedback that I receive from here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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