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I’m hardly waiting to go home

Where I feel tired and so alone

And they all say that it has changed

But I still feel f...ed and so deranged

She holds such misery in her eyes

She’s run away with what was left behind

Caught in the midst of battle cries

She’s not alright; she’s going out of her mind

Chorus:

And I’m stuck here forever

Stuck now, so help me

Falling forever

Falling, so help me

Needing to know that there’s something beyond the

Screaming and pleading that I hold inside me

Asking my shadows to stay far behind me

Wanting to run from the future ahead me

She stares at pictures in a frame

Asking herself if she’s to blame

For all the things that have went wrong

For all the reasons she wrote this song

I can’t hold up for much longer

Been trying hard but it just gets stronger

Been trying hard to compromise

But it’s f...ing hard behind these blistered eyes

Tonight I’ve waited until the end

So don’t pretend to comprehend

I swear I never meant hurt you

I just meant to stress provoke you

But I guess now you have possession

Of my heart in respiration

Goodbye

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well yeah thats another one, i actually put the chorus into this one, unlike in congratualtions where i didnt post the chorus, this song is alot less sorta poetic than the other one. but yeah, tell me what u think, and rememebr dont hold bakc on criticism

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  • 4 weeks later...

it contradictoric somehow, but still quite clear

I do think some of the verses will rhyme but wont actually fit in the rhyme scheme, like:

"I can’t hold up for much longer

Been trying hard but it just gets stronger"

something doesn't feel right about it

but the onces above are really good:

"She stares at pictures in a frame

Asking herself if she’s to blame

For all the things that have went wrong

For all the reasons she wrote this song"

I really like that part :)

that's just my opinion from reading the text only twice, this tekst could turn out totally different when there's music with it ;)

keep writing!

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