TheLizard Posted November 29, 2007 Report Share Posted November 29, 2007 Look at where we are Even you can’t see this turning out well This world is turning into new Hell But really Heaven isn’t that far I think I have a solution The seas are boiling hot The lands are plagued with war What was wilderness is a scar Paradise this is not But you can change all that Look around at those who elected you Do you see any happy faces? Is there peace in any places? Don’t just sit and stew There’s a way to fix this It’s really a very simple plan But explosive in its impact Someone has to do it, in fact And you are just the man Push the damn button, already Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kevin Posted November 29, 2007 Report Share Posted November 29, 2007 Stark and full of ironic jest and challenge - well done . I haven't seen an armageddon theme for awhile . I don't 'like ' ( though some of the best poetry kicks one in the n*ts and makes one think , regardless ) this poem but it is ,nonetheless, a pertinent thought and pretty well structured - though the line "look around at those who elected you " could perhaps be reworked . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tenacious_Peaches Posted November 29, 2007 Report Share Posted November 29, 2007 Holy crap, Tim, this is excellent. I'm with Eye-gore about the "those who elected you" line, only because the majority of the American public didn't elect him. Damned Electoral College. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blue_n_white Posted November 29, 2007 Report Share Posted November 29, 2007 Well even though things are indeed a mess,I'm not quite ready for nuclear winter just yet. And you are right Peachy. It's time to rethink the Electoral College or maybe sh*t-can it entirely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Farin Posted November 29, 2007 Report Share Posted November 29, 2007 I like it it's not your fault the world is like it is, it would be your fault if it stays that way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Levis Posted November 29, 2007 Report Share Posted November 29, 2007 I love the way the last lines lead up to the last line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLizard Posted November 30, 2007 Author Report Share Posted November 30, 2007 Holy crap, Tim, this is excellent. I'm with Eye-gore about the "those who elected you" line, only because the majority of the American public didn't elect him. Damned Electoral College. I'm aware of the electoral system, but he did win fair and square in 2004, because the Democratic convention heads were stupid and didn't go with the candidate that actually could be a decent president, Edwards. Oh well. Glad you liked the rest of it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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