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  1. Watching as the sun sets across the open sea

    I never told you sunsets do strange things to me

    Stare across the distance...with my fingers in your hair

    Then I turn to kiss you....and you're not there.

    ...and I'm tongue tied, tongue tied and twisted over you...

    ...and scared of all the things that we might do.

    I'm tongue tied and twisted while you're crying in the night

    I know that this feels good...but I know that it's not right...I'm tongue tied and twisted...and scared of all the things that we might lose.

    I'm tongue tied and twisted...and I know one of us must choose.

    She says 'dreams are full of promises that no-one ever keeps.

    They visit you at night....then vanish with your sleep.

    Too painful to hang on to

    Too precious to release'

    What do I do...?

    Dive into your ocean.....crash upon your shore?

    Dive into your ocean...but, can I swim there anymore...?

    ******************************

    johnyguitar, this song is beautiful, and LEAVE THE LAST VERSE AS IT IS. the only verse that im a bit worried about is the second, as it is a fusion of simple rhyming and cliches, such as the line "I'm tongue tied and twisted...and scared of all the things that we might lose.

    I'm tongue tied and twisted...and I know one of us must choose."

    but then again, maybe its just me.

    but the rest of it is amazing, and dont listen to anybody that puts you down because this song is brilliant.

  2. coolest guy on the planet!!! we call him "the guy" bcuz we dopnt know his name, and we just think hed be the coolest guy to hang put with hes like double our age and looks homeless, soo cool

    7 - 11 ppl. (you know the ppl at the counter)

  3. I’m hardly waiting to go home

    Where I feel tired and so alone

    And they all say that it has changed

    But I still feel f...ed and so deranged

    She holds such misery in her eyes

    She’s run away with what was left behind

    Caught in the midst of battle cries

    She’s not alright; she’s going out of her mind

    Chorus:

    And I’m stuck here forever

    Stuck now, so help me

    Falling forever

    Falling, so help me

    Needing to know that there’s something beyond the

    Screaming and pleading that I hold inside me

    Asking my shadows to stay far behind me

    Wanting to run from the future ahead me

    She stares at pictures in a frame

    Asking herself if she’s to blame

    For all the things that have went wrong

    For all the reasons she wrote this song

    I can’t hold up for much longer

    Been trying hard but it just gets stronger

    Been trying hard to compromise

    But it’s f...ing hard behind these blistered eyes

    Tonight I’ve waited until the end

    So don’t pretend to comprehend

    I swear I never meant hurt you

    I just meant to stress provoke you

    But I guess now you have possession

    Of my heart in respiration

    Goodbye

    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    well yeah thats another one, i actually put the chorus into this one, unlike in congratualtions where i didnt post the chorus, this song is alot less sorta poetic than the other one. but yeah, tell me what u think, and rememebr dont hold bakc on criticism

  4. thanks everybody:D i really apprectiate everything you guys have said, it was nice meeting all of you guys, and yeah its good i didnt decide to smarten up the language i use ;).

    oh and also about the writing, i think this is one of my best, so if i post some other song or something dont expect it to be as good ;)

  5. woah everybodys choices are different to mine, i think its because i hardly listen to older music, im not sure if all of thats older music, im just guessing.

    but mine are:

    chris martin ( :) )

    mark shinoda (i think thats the guys name, the rapper form linkin park)

    pete wentz (is alright)

    theres more but cant think at the moment lol

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