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sams town - the killers
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coolest guy on the planet!!! we call him "the guy" bcuz we dopnt know his name, and we just think hed be the coolest guy to hang put with hes like double our age and looks homeless, soo cool
7 - 11 ppl. (you know the ppl at the counter)
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touch me - the doors lol (even though thats sorta broken english)
i couldnt possible resist such a .....
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i am REALLY sorry bout the language, all i did was copy and paste it, so i didnt really think about changing the swearing
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you use very wise words.
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rock the house - gorillaz
yes! of course i will....
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funnily enoguh hes cool lol
the cat in the hat
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to the end - my chemical romance
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sorry my bad
i will never let.....
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let it bleed - the used
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Na na na na naa - kaiser chiefs
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electric (although its close)
quiet or loud songs
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I’m hardly waiting to go home
Where I feel tired and so alone
And they all say that it has changed
But I still feel f...ed and so deranged
She holds such misery in her eyes
She’s run away with what was left behind
Caught in the midst of battle cries
She’s not alright; she’s going out of her mind
Chorus:
And I’m stuck here forever
Stuck now, so help me
Falling forever
Falling, so help me
Needing to know that there’s something beyond the
Screaming and pleading that I hold inside me
Asking my shadows to stay far behind me
Wanting to run from the future ahead me
She stares at pictures in a frame
Asking herself if she’s to blame
For all the things that have went wrong
For all the reasons she wrote this song
I can’t hold up for much longer
Been trying hard but it just gets stronger
Been trying hard to compromise
But it’s f...ing hard behind these blistered eyes
Tonight I’ve waited until the end
So don’t pretend to comprehend
I swear I never meant hurt you
I just meant to stress provoke you
But I guess now you have possession
Of my heart in respiration
Goodbye
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well yeah thats another one, i actually put the chorus into this one, unlike in congratualtions where i didnt post the chorus, this song is alot less sorta poetic than the other one. but yeah, tell me what u think, and rememebr dont hold bakc on criticism
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thanks everybody:D i really apprectiate everything you guys have said, it was nice meeting all of you guys, and yeah its good i didnt decide to smarten up the language i use .
oh and also about the writing, i think this is one of my best, so if i post some other song or something dont expect it to be as good
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ladies and gentlemen - hot hot heat
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her chin hair
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Top Ten Made Up Words That Rhyme With Grinch
10. Splinch
9. son of a binch
8. rinch
7. Mini-minch
6. Benmont Tench
5. Qxinch
4. E L V I N C H
3. condinch
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tales - wolfmother
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the ocean - the bravery
sometimes i wish i could.....
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woah everybodys choices are different to mine, i think its because i hardly listen to older music, im not sure if all of thats older music, im just guessing.
but mine are:
chris martin ( )
mark shinoda (i think thats the guys name, the rapper form linkin park)
pete wentz (is alright)
theres more but cant think at the moment lol
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thanks. i had a welcome when i first joined like a week ago or something. but yeah thanks anyway
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fistful of steel - rage against the machine
i never imagine it would come to....
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How far we've come - matchbox twenty
so what did you do about...
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well thanks alot , yeah i mean i didnt put as much effort in the third verse as i did in the first 2, i mean for the first verse i was playing around with it for like a month or more lol!
but yeah thanks
Write a song together
in Creative Writing
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Watching as the sun sets across the open sea
I never told you sunsets do strange things to me
Stare across the distance...with my fingers in your hair
Then I turn to kiss you....and you're not there.
...and I'm tongue tied, tongue tied and twisted over you...
...and scared of all the things that we might do.
I'm tongue tied and twisted while you're crying in the night
I know that this feels good...but I know that it's not right...I'm tongue tied and twisted...and scared of all the things that we might lose.
I'm tongue tied and twisted...and I know one of us must choose.
She says 'dreams are full of promises that no-one ever keeps.
They visit you at night....then vanish with your sleep.
Too painful to hang on to
Too precious to release'
What do I do...?
Dive into your ocean.....crash upon your shore?
Dive into your ocean...but, can I swim there anymore...?
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johnyguitar, this song is beautiful, and LEAVE THE LAST VERSE AS IT IS. the only verse that im a bit worried about is the second, as it is a fusion of simple rhyming and cliches, such as the line "I'm tongue tied and twisted...and scared of all the things that we might lose.
I'm tongue tied and twisted...and I know one of us must choose."
but then again, maybe its just me.
but the rest of it is amazing, and dont listen to anybody that puts you down because this song is brilliant.