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murdocking

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  1. Watching as the sun sets across the open sea I never told you sunsets do strange things to me Stare across the distance...with my fingers in your hair Then I turn to kiss you....and you're not there. ...and I'm tongue tied, tongue tied and twisted over you... ...and scared of all the things that we might do. I'm tongue tied and twisted while you're crying in the night I know that this feels good...but I know that it's not right...I'm tongue tied and twisted...and scared of all the things that we might lose. I'm tongue tied and twisted...and I know one of us must choose. She says 'dreams are full of promises that no-one ever keeps. They visit you at night....then vanish with your sleep. Too painful to hang on to Too precious to release' What do I do...? Dive into your ocean.....crash upon your shore? Dive into your ocean...but, can I swim there anymore...? ****************************** johnyguitar, this song is beautiful, and LEAVE THE LAST VERSE AS IT IS. the only verse that im a bit worried about is the second, as it is a fusion of simple rhyming and cliches, such as the line "I'm tongue tied and twisted...and scared of all the things that we might lose. I'm tongue tied and twisted...and I know one of us must choose." but then again, maybe its just me. but the rest of it is amazing, and dont listen to anybody that puts you down because this song is brilliant.
  2. sams town - the killers
  3. coolest guy on the planet!!! we call him "the guy" bcuz we dopnt know his name, and we just think hed be the coolest guy to hang put with hes like double our age and looks homeless, soo cool 7 - 11 ppl. (you know the ppl at the counter)
  4. touch me - the doors lol (even though thats sorta broken english) i couldnt possible resist such a .....
  5. i am REALLY sorry bout the language, all i did was copy and paste it, so i didnt really think about changing the swearing
  6. rock the house - gorillaz yes! of course i will....
  7. funnily enoguh hes cool lol the cat in the hat
  8. to the end - my chemical romance
  9. sorry my bad i will never let.....
  10. Na na na na naa - kaiser chiefs
  11. electric (although its close) quiet or loud songs
  12. I’m hardly waiting to go home Where I feel tired and so alone And they all say that it has changed But I still feel f...ed and so deranged She holds such misery in her eyes She’s run away with what was left behind Caught in the midst of battle cries She’s not alright; she’s going out of her mind Chorus: And I’m stuck here forever Stuck now, so help me Falling forever Falling, so help me Needing to know that there’s something beyond the Screaming and pleading that I hold inside me Asking my shadows to stay far behind me Wanting to run from the future ahead me She stares at pictures in a frame Asking herself if she’s to blame For all the things that have went wrong For all the reasons she wrote this song I can’t hold up for much longer Been trying hard but it just gets stronger Been trying hard to compromise But it’s f...ing hard behind these blistered eyes Tonight I’ve waited until the end So don’t pretend to comprehend I swear I never meant hurt you I just meant to stress provoke you But I guess now you have possession Of my heart in respiration Goodbye ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ well yeah thats another one, i actually put the chorus into this one, unlike in congratualtions where i didnt post the chorus, this song is alot less sorta poetic than the other one. but yeah, tell me what u think, and rememebr dont hold bakc on criticism
  13. thanks everybody:D i really apprectiate everything you guys have said, it was nice meeting all of you guys, and yeah its good i didnt decide to smarten up the language i use . oh and also about the writing, i think this is one of my best, so if i post some other song or something dont expect it to be as good
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